Vinegar Love

An angst poem.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Vinegar Love

Your love is

Like vinegar.

It's bitter

To my tongue,

It burns my heart,

And it pickles

My soul.

 

Your promises

Are as empty

To me as my

Bank account

Was when you were

Finished with me.

 

To think that

I believed

That you could

Spend your

Life sharing good

Times with me,

Feeling happy

And secure. 

 

That is just

As crazy as

Believing that

You could

Spin a mountain

Of manure

Into a ship

Filled with gold.

 

My ability to trust

Has been depleted,

Since all of my hopes

And dreams of building

A family with you

Have been defeated.

 

Thank God your sperm

Never took me to carry

A baby full-term. 

 

Raising spawn from

You would be like

Learning to live my

Life with my brain

Full of worms.

 

Your head

Is so huge

So bald

And so ugly.

 

The view makes me

Laugh and

Smile so smugly.

 

Let's see who you

Find to take my place.

 

Poor girl,

After awhile

She will have no

Smile on her face.

 

For smiles,

You and your

Wretched family

Will surely erase.

 

So let me move on

As quickly as I can,

Only then

I might finally

Have a chance to

Meet a real man.

 

Goodbye my love.

It was you,

Who I cherished

For so many years.

 

No longer

Will I wait

Patiently for my

Life to appear.

 

Now my life

Will take off,

My dreams shall

Take place,

And my tears

Will dry up

Like your Mom's

Ugly face.

 

 

Reviews

[.]

That rocked! It's great to feel so much energy blast onto the page! Venting it out is the only way to rage some times! xD

Ashley

[Michael X]

sounds like you still love him, which isn't neccessarily a bad thing,
from this poem he seems to have alot of star qualities :P
actually awsomely done marie, you have a captivating way with
presentation, your words flowed sweet upon a sour subject.
thanks for sharing your talent

[Tina Kline]

Ugh, it always feels so liberating and SO GOOD to finally escape those sort of relationships, at least it did for me! You did a wonderful job describing the situation.

[Cynthia]

Graet Write!
I always enjoy reading your peoms, cause it sounds true!
Your words if full of feelings too!

[M Garcia]

Nicely written. You can definitely feel the angst in the words you have written.

[Black Cat Fever]

There is a lot of hurt and pain in these words and with good reason I believe. In my opinion the best revenge is to do so much better than the creep who hurt you so badly. Very impressive job on this!

[just rose.]

what's interesting here is the ambivalence ... hate and love in equal measure, with the negativity expressed as a reflection of the ex-lover's ugliness ... i do know what this is like, and there is a note of tongue-in-cheek in here too which i'm not sure you intended, but nevertheless the mom in the final two lines had a kind of black humor to it. i feel the sadness underneath this piece. but ultimately it reads as a triumph of a spirit over hardship. i almost heard "i will survive" playing underneath it all. well done.

[Buddhistboy73]

Sweetly melancholic piece here..:)
Love the concept and the imagery here is fantastic. A universal subject that merits the words you penned here....glad you have found a way to express such human emotions...look forward to reading more of your thoughts on here....:)

[Eagle Cruagh]

I would hate to be in that guy`s
ugly shoes. What a loser and you
drew a picture that nobody can miss
especially the guy that took you so for
granted.
Well written. You wrote it so well and
also dug his grave.

Great writing.

------ Eagle Cruagh

[Liza]

wow! you're lethal girl
i love it
(picking up jaw)