William

A love poem.

William

 

 

Under the oak tree

Lounging with friends

By the creek,

 

Me resting my head

In your lap,

Staring at the sunlight

Shining through the

Leaves of the tree

As the sound of water

Trickled by,

 

Tenderly you

Combed your

Fingers through

My hair,

And laughed when

They couldn’t

Make it through

My curls,

I laughed too

And thumped your leg

Because it hurt,

 

You looked at

Me with your

Dark green eyes

Surrounded by the

Longest brown

Eyelashes

I’ve ever seen on

A man,

And said

In your most

Sincere voice,

You’re beautiful,

You know,

Just beautiful!

 

Of all the moments

In my life,

That one stands

Out for me

More than

Most others.

 

It was a heartfelt

Expression

At a carefree

Moment,

Where I was

Touched

By the look

Of love in

Your eyes

And on your

Face,

As I heard

Your sweet love

Fill my ears

On that hot

Summer day.

 

 

Author's Note

Some moments you'll never forget.

Reviews

[Pax Analog]

Timeless romantic epiphany. This poem speaks to the memory many have of spontaneous youthful pure love connections. It has the quality of a flashback in a movie, of a cherished simpler time before the world seemed to grow darker.

You keep the details minimal enough to emanate a timeless Zen quality as well, that strange way certain simple pure-spirited gestures have of being ALL such gestures.

Beautiful.

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

This was really romantic and very sweet. I really think you did a great job on this poem. It's true you will probably never forget that moment ever. It was a very special moment in your life. It's going in my favorites. Thanks for sharing. :)

[Christy Sargent]

Very lovely, Marie...
It surely is moments like this that remind us that we are loved....really loved. Congratulations on wining first place in the "Just Love" contest. Christy

[Steve]

This one came from your heart Marie.......and that alone makes it precious!

[Black Cat Fever]

Some are worth remembering as this one really is. It creates a tender and romantic scene.

[Jeff Bresee]

Smooth. The flow was so relaxing.

[ashley]

Oh, this is beautiful. To experience such innocent love... even a second. Perfect. You wrote this so beautifully. Great job! :D

[KL]

You know if anybody else had written this I would've said it sounded cliche and that it was something I had read a million times by a million other people... but you really, really made it into something of your own, and were so precise in your simple choice of words that it came across uniquely. It is amazing how some moments just stay so clear in your mind no matter how much time passes. You captured it, great.

[Mauricio Montoya]

I take this was someone special in your life. Excellent write.

[David W Moore III]

Very poignent moment. And yes there are too few of these so treasure them. Well put.