I could sense this pouring out of your soul like warm milk from a cauldron...
Such an amazing piece, every single emotion all wrapped into one page. Guilt, pain, disappointment, love, sentiment, reminiscence... This takes my breath away.
I could not find anything that needs improvement. The flow was steady, and I can tell you didn't hold back... the description and vivid elaboration on the feelings of your sacred heart- it shocks me.
I cannot pick a certain stanza to be my favorite, nor a certain section. This is just astronomical- the only poem on this site that I do believe is memorable.
Wow... it does sound like it was made especially for you. Such a long poem with short lines and short words. I think your poem is very imaginative especially when the first few stanzas. There are so many stanzas I keep losing count. The way you have wrote this poem is like as if you wanted to show the reader your childhood memories. The words you have used sound so true and draws teh reader in. The poem welcomes the reader into your past.
The poem rolls out like a film reel, highlighted by the gnarly facts of family life, and delivered w/your unassuming, unflinching honesty.
This honesty is particularly impressive walking right up to the end of days, either escorting the blood tie, or facing one's own mortality. Dealing w/the big D makes the rest pale by comparison and our stature increases for living lives worthy of the name instead of the proverbial "quiet desperation" ones fanned by the frickin' zombified media.
A sad but a beautiful poem. In a long life. We will make many mistakes. Like the description of the father sin and mistakes. I wonder often what will happen to my soul? I like the story. I could see the child walking with the father. A very good ending to a outstanding poem. Forgiveness is hardest to receive from your self.
Coyote
Wow, this here is poetry. True poetry comes from the soul where we as poets have our strength, our voice, this here is emotion. I see why it's so special to you, this is very personal indeed, it's the type that makes you want to wrap your arms around that person letting them know all will be ok. Thank you for sharing this with me.