red clay memories

a poem describing the texture of my memories

red clay memories

 

in the rugged cracked red clay

earth are my memories

dirt that is so dry

it blows like dust in the wind

when you ball it in your hand

and blow on it

 

my tears flow

glossing over them

 

the water-mixed memories

sink to the bottom

forming deep tepid pools of resource

for my hungry soul when I'm

parched for more

 

 

Reviews

[alesuriko]

I really liked this poem. Amazingly vivid imagery that you can feel and see. Wonderful words and metaphors. Good flow and rhythm. I love the imagery with the dirt blowing, really beautiful. It has maybe a slight spark of decadence with the dirt imagery, but that's about it, only a slight possible glimpse that you're not even sure you saw. Thanks for entering it in my contest anyway though. Wonderful poem, great job.

[*skittlez*]

i agree with arra frost with everything they said about this poemi really love it

[Tina Kline]

Vivid images of sadness and disappointment.

[Linear]

A little deep our/your memories lie within the dusty cracks of fading thoughts, mixed with tears of both sorrow and joy, what a poem you write with mind and pen.

Well written, perfect

[Twilight]

Interesting! Quite an imaginative way to both describe and think about human memories, and their role in our lives. Like clay, memories can be moulded or shaped by the passage of time. Also, imprints can be left in strips of clay. Perhaps, a metaphor for the fact that memories leave imprints in our minds? Thankyou Marie!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Our roots can never be cut off and our past helps define our character... I see a lot of sentiment in this poem.

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great metaphors, strong images..a good solid write

[Jibey]

A very graphic image.. with powerful emotions encapsulated in the clay

[Arsenic Nemesis]

Really liked the imagery of this, it's really well done indeed. I loved the last two lines, they were really captivating. A wonderful job, I really enjoyed this. Keep up the good work!~

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

Wow! This is deep. You dove into a part of the mind that
we dont often get to visit. The imagery was amazing.
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