Invisible Kid

A poem voiced to a young lady's parents.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Invisible Kid

 

Carefully

I apply my make-up,

to look beautiful to

the world around me.

 

Thoughtfully,

I select the words

that will represent me in

this world that I take part in.

 

Meticulously,

I choose which clothes to wear

ones that will provoke reaction from

the people that surround

me in this world.

 

These details take too much time

for you to take notice.

 

There are too many important

tasks for us to accomplish

together in this world.

 

Don't you want to

get to know the

real me?

 

Don't you want to see how

beautiful I am to

those around me?

 

Don't you want to read

the thoughts of mine

that people cherish so

much in this world?

 

You ask my opinions

but when I give them freely,

they provoke your rage

deep within your being.

 

Do I always have to hide

 or be ashamed to

show the vulnerable

 side of me to you?

 

Will I always have

to be invisible to you?

 

I want to scream!

 

I want to shout out on

top of the highest mountain

that I'm alive,

and you prefer to close

your eyes and ears to me.

 

You prefer for me to disappear,

to hide deep within the scene

of things in this world.

 

You prefer for me

to remain invisible to you forever.

 

Why would you want to hide

your finest creation?

 

Why would you want

an invisible me?

 

 

Reviews

[An owl on the moon]

Oh how many wander through life in the invisible... wanting so much to have the attention or affection of others, only to end up feeling completely alone.. So many of us have been there.. can relate to your words.. the longing.. Beautifully bittersweet...

[OT]

brilliant!! it has a poignant melancholy to it, the idea of actions - from the synonyms - thoughtfully, carefully, meticulously - and then on to the rest of the story!! very well written and a great poem!!!

[Gone]

So many of us have felt invisible to the world and more especially our friends. As your poem says,

These details take too much time
for you to take notice.

There are too many important
tasks for us to accomplish
together in this world.

and then when they do ask or we make them listen the reaction is hostile!

You ask my opinions
but when I give them freely,
they provoke your rage
deep within your being.

This is well expressed and I sometimes feel the same way. Once it was a dominant feeling. I think this poem will connect with the majority of people who feel the same way. It seems we are all to differing extent guilty of being too preoccupied with ourselves to hear our friends, yet feel rejected and isolated when they in turn do the same to us!

This is an excellent poem. I certainly got me thinking. Well done.

[KAREN]

Beatiful poem, but sad to have to live like that! Well done!

[Kelsie Eileen Stark]

This is sad, and tells raw emotions. The image is also melochony, but beautiful

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Powerful poem, A person should not have to live their lives as if they are invisible when they have so much to give and over!

[Jibey]

Another well constructed piece, expressing the longings of a beautiful heart to be recognised and cherished... a cry from the heart - and a powerful one...

[alesuriko]

Interesting. I like the flow and the rhythm of this poem and the intentions behind it. It's a really well written piece and expresses so much about how society judges people based on looks. Beautifully done.

[Liza]

empowering expression of silence; how one's thoughts can be disturbing to others yet we sometimes wear a mask of protection to draw love into our world and accomodate others with our discomforts. the writer is no longer staying invisible; beautiful.