Quiet Moments

an ABC poem

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Quiet Moments

 

Sunlight beaming through the slanted shutters

Tiny dancing dust particles floating mid-air

Underneath desk a sleeping dog snores

Vanishing baby dreams

In my quiet moments, they haunt me

Reviews

[Gone]

This suggests to me infertility problems "Vanishing baby dreams In my quiet moments, they haunt me" the grieving womb for the child that never was or could be. This is the saddest thing in all creation the woman who desires to bear a child but is unable to. A peaceful and otherwise enjoyable day except for the pain of the unfulfilled womb. This one really hit me. exceptional write.

[Undying Glory]

very nice work, i love this write! this was short yet very elegant work. i really enjoyed this great poem. awesome!

[Kelsie Eileen Stark]

This was beautiful- the imagery was brilliant. The picture went well with the piece itself~

[Norma M Sutton]

This is beautiful.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Dreamy, peaceful, relaxing and then boom it turn sad! Great write!

[D.J. Lutz]

Perfect.

[KAREN]

Starts out with a sense of peace, and ends with an almost feelings of dread. A good write as aways!

[Robin]

filtering through the sad shutters of melancholy ..

[Tina Kline]

This starts out tranquil but turns sad when the baby dreams show up. It seems to me that the person in the poem lost a child and the pain is haunting.

[Arsenic Nemesis]

Beautiful, this is absolutely fantastic, I love it - keep up the good work!~