Quiet Moments

an ABC poem

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Quiet Moments

 

Sunlight beaming through the slanted shutters

Tiny dancing dust particles floating mid-air

Underneath desk a sleeping dog snores

Vanishing baby dreams

In my quiet moments, they haunt me

Reviews

[Gone]

This suggests to me infertility problems "Vanishing baby dreams In my quiet moments, they haunt me" the grieving womb for the child that never was or could be. This is the saddest thing in all creation the woman who desires to bear a child but is unable to. A peaceful and otherwise enjoyable day except for the pain of the unfulfilled womb. This one really hit me. exceptional write.

[YouoweYoupay]

Very peaceful and momentarily beautiful...ENJOYED. : )

[Abbie]

kinda confusing message here but still good :)


100/100

[Short.Nerd]

Nice flow! Great job(:

[AloysiaVerben]

I like this poem. It flows easily and is nice to read :)

[OT]

oh very descriptive!! "tiny dancing dust particles floating mid-air" - I love that! it has a kind of ethereal first few lines but then the subtle poignance hits you in the last 2 lines, the reality of it and the sadness!!

[Alicia Schroeder]

This was awesome.. Great peice.

[Sunny Skye]

I like it very good. Good Job.

-SkyeBlanco-

[Priyankaabhilaashi]

Cute..!!!

[Dinesh Sairam]

Awesome. Really felt like a Japanese style poem (Which I, ofcourse, love). Well done.

[HopelesslyDevoted]

simple and beautiful!