LEMONHEAD

Lemonhead

Lemonhead your taste

is too sour to my  tongue,

Your lemon zest has the power to

twist and contort my full pouty lips,

to pucker-up like two crooked lines of an

 equal sign.

 

You’re a liar, a fink, a worthlessly fake

human being. If I could smell you,

your odor would stink

and repulse me.

 

No wonder you cower in your dark corner,

sucking your red throbbing thumb.

 

You are nothing but

a useless lemonhead,

no one cares to eat.

Reviews

[...]

... that's amazingly well written ... very potent ... and very witty ... and very black in its humour ... i liked these lines a lot ...

Your lemon zest has the power to

twist and contort my full pouty lips,

to pucker-up like two crooked lines of an

equal sign.

... they're so unique ... have never come across such a distinct image ... amazing ...

You are nothing but

a useless lemonhead,

no one cares to eat.

... loved these lines ... that end this brilliant verse ... a 100 for this one ... and yeah ... i do wish you could change the shade of yellow ... though i selected the text and read it just fine ... thanks for writing this and thanks for sharing it ...

[Mauricio Montoya]

nice work the olny thing its too yellow to read, otherwise great job well done.

[nono]

This is interesting I like a lot keep it up!

[AK]

So there!
Reminds me of a certain elected (by whom I'm not sure) official. Good job.

[Marie Harrison]

When I wrote this poem I was angry at myself, another person and the world. It's also a parody poem about anger itself. The poem's intention is more a humorous take on anger more than anything else.

[Ryan Falzon - Tymon]

The poem starts off great but the ending is a bit...dull. Could have used a better last stanza. also, the color threw me off from read it at first.

good work =)

[alesuriko]

Interesting. I hate the color because I damages my eyes haha but it works for the poem. Your second stanza was really weak, however, it just didn't flow at all or have a good rhythm to it like the first stanza did. Particularly with how you made the break between "a worthlessly fake / human being." It simply doesn't sound good to the ear. The description in the first stanza, however, is a great opening. It really set the tone and I enjoyed it. Although I wasn't really intrigued or interested in the direction you took with the "lemonhead" it was a nice poem, written pretty well. The description was good and clear. Well done.