Broken

This is a poem I wrote with the intention of a girl starting it, then someone else finding it and finishing it.

Living, laughing,learning to fly,

I'll find a way to touch the sky,

Living, laughing, learning to fly,

I'll smile as I soar high.

No fear, no doubt, not thinking things through,

I turn, I smile, I get distracted by you,

No fear, no doubt, not thinking things through,

I break and shatter as you rip my heart in two.

Falling, crying, regretting my trust,

rip my heart out quickly, if you must...

Falling, crying, regretting her trust,

She hit the ground nothing but dust...

Author's Note

I want your honest opinion.

Reviews

[Calibaster]

I love it! That is my honest opinion! :) ;) You have a fantastic voice in your writing that no one else can match! Keep it up!

[chicandsleek77]

thank you.

[Calibaster]

You're welcome!

[David Burke]

This is very good :) keep up the good work!

[chicandsleek77]

Thanks!!! That means a lot coming from such a great poet.

[David Burke]

You're welcome kido, and thank you that means a lot to hear you say that

[chicandsleek77]

Your welcome. I've been reading all your poems, I can only hope to be half as great of writers as you are.

[David Burke]

The best advice I can give you is let your soul tell the story, and your heart write the words

[chicandsleek77]

I'll definitely try that. Thanks for the advice.

[David Burke]

Anytime kido, I guarantee if you learn to do that it'll come out great every time