Me and You

I love the ocean

I think I can spend all my days there

Hoping to love more deeply, be wild and careless; and remembering who I am

Because we do not have forever, and nothing is guaranteed

So just spend a little time away

To be beautiful and not fade to grey

To be free and love endlessly

Away Away, Away from today. Because tomorrow is more beautiful.

And once more I find peace in the midst of forgetting time.

Reviews

[Nandawula Regine Kabali..]

I connected so much to this piece because the beach is my happy place. I feel like when I'm there, everything makes sense and my mind feels so so much clearer. It's truly a beautiful poem ❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

This is a powerful piece and I love it.
First of all, their is nothing as beautiful as nature and it's always ready to entertain, embrace and make us to experience true peace from within.

Being alone in the garden of greens listening to the birds singing, watching the colourful butterflies and enjoying the tranquility of their company is something I'll never stop loving. Being at the beach alone at sunset, watching the sun as it goes to rest, lost in imagination, having the breeze caress my skin, musing away my worries.

I think every introvert have this trait – being alone in our own world where we keep doing what we love, being the best friend of nature which helps us to create a space where we go to find ourselves each time we felt lost.

Nicely penned, Cheyenne.

[Coyote Poetry]

Me too dear Cheyenne.
"Away Away, Away from today. Because tomorrow is more beautiful.
And once more I find peace in the midst of forgetting time."
You know, I love the sea and thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Dave Brown]

I easily relate to this because I've lived close to the ocean most of my life and there is very little to compare

[Ranger Kessel]

Nit forever but we can enjoy the moments. A nice post

[John the Baptist]

Wise observation here. Indeed, we do not have forever, and nothing is guaranteed. Still, forgetting time is the key. We are never at peace as long as time continues to drive us.

[Betty Hermelee]

Spending time away a like getting a renewal on life. I, myself, find solace in the mountains, but that's where I live; so for me, the ocean is a respite of great magnitude. And one usually forgets about time when one is in a dreamy trance. Away is key word here and it makes total sense.
Nice write
Best, B

[Delmar Cooper]

I would love to know more about the ocean; love to let you give me examples, show me the depth and width of the sea, but really you gave me enough in nine lines of poetry to satisfy my lust for salt water.

Beautiful poem and thank you for sharing it with us.

[keith]

it's a great write that only a blow hard know-it-all would take issue with it
don't worry the SOB has something negative to say about everybody's work ... that is unless he penned it
it's OK to tell him to take a hike!

[JayG]

• I love the ocean

Assume the reader lives in Arizona, and has never been near the ocean. Telling them that you, someone they know nothing about, loves it, for unstated reasons, is less meaningful than had you said, "I love strawberry," because the reader has probably experienced them.

Do you love the feeling of weightlessness as you glide along the flank of a sunken ship? The lift of a sailboat as it mounts a wave? The power of a Jet-ski as it leaps from as wavetop? The feeling as the curl of a wave enwraps both you and your board? The sounds of the beach?

My point? The story behind that love remains in your head, with the things you say referencing THEM, without placing them into the reader's mind. But turn that inside out. Write the poem in a way that makes the reader say, "I love the ocean." Make it live for them. Make them envy, and share, your time there.

Don't tell, SHOW. And show them, not as a picture, or a description, but as life.

If you say: "Fingertips stroking my back, so gently, bring contentment." That evokes a memory that most readers will share. Speak of "the screams of children at play," or "the scent of insect repellent," and the reader is right there.

So make that work for you. In other words, don't tell the reader a story, make them live it.

Well, you did ask... 😆