The special one

just a poem I wrote....its not really about anybody

 Why can't you just try?
  I'm waiting here for you
  You are my special one
   but where have you gone?

   What happened between us?
   We used to be so close
    but now you've gone away
    Will we ever be together?

    Do you dream about me?
     I dream about you
     we need to be together
      because your my special one

Author's Note

This one was bad but I still tried....my emotions have been messed up lately

Reviews

[Tapher]

the ones you write created in this manner always have that special feeling of the writer knowing what she wants and needs, but yet never able to find it and acheive it. great work. hang in there.

[Blindfolded]

You did a wonderful job expressing yourself. Your special one brings out true emotions, don't change a thing.

[Tasha]

I thought this was a beautiful expression of your emotions. I like it the way it is, don't change it.

[S. Michael Long]

i understand where you are at, i have been there as a writer and as a person.. i would recommend leaving this poem as it is.. then come back to it a few years from now.. you will be able to express it better and it might end up being the best poem you ever wrote.. because i think its great (: -s

[Queen of Sin]

Than you all for the encouraging words....I really appreciate it :)

[Everett DeValle]

Awe, things happen, some times, it doesn't click...but rest assured, you will find someone that will click with you, thus, a new poem, will emerge from your emotions. :)

I loved how you flowed your emotions on this write. In addition, Thank you for the friends request, I gladly accepted.

~Ev

[Aravind]

I recommend a little touch up :D

Otherwise, a great message, filled with emotions... just try some stylistic devices to better express ur message...

[Crazy Cat Man]

Don't to be self-conscious of u think ur poem is bad. its better than to just write it out even when ur emotional. its better than trying to a force a poem. then those are bad when its force. this one is good. :)

[EMF]

At the minute, what I see on the page is raw emotion. Never a bad thing. You can polish it up later, when you don't feel would up. Nice pace and structure to it. But did I like it. Yeah. Damn right I did. It has passion.

[Bare trees]

Putting your emotions on the page is part of being a writer. Everything can be revised later. Could use a touch more imagination but it's not bad.