Reptile

Abominable cynic, like a
cyberspace mimic, like an
art house critic, always
hidden behind your walls.

Wireless royalty of
digitized fantasy
cocooning reality for
the greater anonymity.

Mechanical monkey throwing
s**t at catastrophe and
donning robes of iniquity
shielding emerald insanity.

Spitting hate in the wind
vomiting lies and sin your
hell won’t begin to
provide justice within.

Repugnant reptile gnawing
holes through security and
offering naught but
cryptological obscurity.
 

Reviews

[Collette]

Damn Damian, the flow in this piece is stunning. I could feel it! The language flirts with a whimsical, lyrical feel, which definitely adds to the vibe. I think you've done a fine job with this piece. It gets the point across without relying on heavy things to make the reader think. I'm thinking.....

These lines were a strong hook, quite possibly some of the best I've encountered:

Abominable cynic, like a
cyberspace mimic, like an
art house critic, always
hidden behind your walls

The sing-song quality makes that mimicing theme come to life. Excellent write, my friend. Although I didn't have to tell you that. :)

[robin]

This is where Reznor left his balls. We better call him Damian! This is a really fine example of cyberpunk mod. Like Hackers on poetry. A very fun read, security issues plaguing you like a coldblooded visitor? I'm impressed!

[alternative_be]

Could the reptile be a description of a nearly pensioned, totally apathic ... civil servant?

[cyanskye]

Well, I didn't like the font and ... Just kidding, you are going to make me re-think my discomfort with poetry. Really loved the first stanza and the rest just flowed so well.
snap snap, Cool man, Real cool.
C

[Becca]

Whew Damian,
As Jeff stated..the interpretation will differ with each reader.
You perfectly described someone I have encountered online.
All I can say is I like it!

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Great cadence to this work - powerful, imaginative wording - reminds me of a chameleon in sheeps clothing if that makes any sense...well done. Thank you.
Light,
Siddartha

[J. James Reider]

the rhyme scheme in the first stanza is priceless... it really sets the tempo for the rest of the piece... makes my computer seem evil... ::throwing it out the window:: haha... good job, a very worthy poem that is open for interpretation by each individual reader... it also left me wanting more... perfect meter and excellent word choices frame this into an overall great piece.

[Lalli]

damian, brillian! the combination of words used is simply creative genius... you conveyed the reptile within some of the online critics with sheer artistry.

much love n respect

-Lalli

[Poeticpiers]

Wonderfully satirical I suspect you do not like self important critics who cant write but profess to know all about everything

[Seriana]

That was wicked cool. I really liked it. I'm beginning to appreciate rhyming more and more when something this good comes along. Great piece!

[yinseriv]

Can you see me slouched in the corner. Espresso to my lips. I am here to pay homage. Love the Beat you deftly flip.