The Truth of Lies (revised)

a collaboration with luthien7.

we are the zombie crowd
our fear is our guide
we scream at humanity
and sever all our ties.

…today, Britany Spears gave birth to her second…

ambling aimless after nothing
we're all so dead inside
we decay with every step
and rot truth within our eyes.

…at a news conference earlier this afternoon, President Bush said…

we are the zombie crowd
here we hunt and we hide
we are deceased, awake
truth becomes improvised.

…sources say that American Idol will see a drop in ratings this season due to…

talking heads in a vacuum
we're all so dead inside
walking by news tickers
and parroting parasites.

…in a related story, after almost eight years, Osama bin Laden has yet to be…

we are the zombie crowd
we're all so dead inside
we've become the bellies for
a food of misguiding lies.
 

Author's Note

After consideration, and after luthien7 explained the meaning of villanelle poetry, she and I revised the original work together to produce this piece. Personally, I think it turned out great. Thanks Luthien! Your expertise is much appreciated!

Reviews

[Gravedigger]

I couldn't agree more. I have yet to see a decent news program. it all seems so programed that I hardly ever care what's going on. A lot of what we isn't even what is really happening in the world, and everybody is content to merely be told something. I think my favortie line was'

"We are deceased awake
And truth becomes improvised"

Because nobody really cares anymore.
Really provoking thoughts. Awesome job!

[yinseriv]

You both deserve a hearty shout out for writing the truth that America doesn't want us to see.

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I haven't read the original piece, but I like this fine just the way it is. Your work makes us stop the routine of our daily lives, take a good look around, and let out a primal scream!

[Maya]

good job on this, but im really sick of hearing how s****y america is and how lifeless we all are, what about hope? i dont know this poem is just so dark and down and really sad (AND good) but i would like to see some type of solution or answer, something more come out of it. but good job to both of you, this is a beautiful poem.

[cyanskye]

Again, you are all forcing me to rethink my aversion to poetry. Very interesting, I think the format makes for a very powerful statement. I need to send this to my son, the poly sci major. He will paste it up on his wall of fame.
C

[poddar kushal]

todays world is beautifully echoed in this gem of a writing

[TL Boehm]

it did turn out great. This is a wake up call kind of poem. Intelligent, unapologetic, pointed writing. Well done.

[Fran Marie]

Hmmm, The News Media ~ not my favorite thing to watch on TV to be sure~this is a nicely penned collaboration piece you two~ very well DonE!~Fran~

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

Now this one, I really enjoyed it. Truthful and honest how the world is today. Wonderfully written. Loved the lines put in between.

Great Write.

[PhoeniX]

hhmmm... this one really gets me thinking. the media world is something i dont rely on with news any more.

[THE BLACK SEAL]

i immensely enjoyed this. fave material!!