Always in Our Sanctuary

They meet in between.

Sometimes, he’s an electric blue-eyed eagle with a searing stare and a laid-back stance

A gentle and gracious flamingo would shed feathers and change in a glance

Rising from the ground, a savage, flaring phoenix appears

They ascend and swirl the sky, embodying the gods’ greatest fears

 

More often than not, he’s the gallant, vigorous archer

Running from the humid forest while stretching his course, oak wood bow to tigers with eagerness

Until he hears the murmuring waves, he slows down and goes to the sea

He rests with the fish, embracing her cool tranquility

 

Rarely, she’s the radiant bumblebee, fluttering in the fragrant yard

Even on a rainy day, she spreads grains of joy with regard

Seeing the pale, withering wildflower, she showers him with fulfillment

They stay awake as the warm daylight comes, surrounded in the sweet-scented element

 

He’s the diver, who went to the depths of the clear, salty ocean

The most lustrous and elegant pearl was obtained because of devotion

He’s satisfied so he keeps her and caresses her fair face,

Reminds her that she’ll be safe here with him always

Author's Note

Feel free to tell me your thoughts about my poem! I really hope I'll be able to improve as I continue to write here :>

Reviews

[barleygirl]

Your opening stanza is mind-blowing in originality & freshness . . . I love character portraits drawn in words, & this is the crux of how that can be done with high imagination. Also, I love it when a writer describes a loving relationship from a million fresh new angles (I'm sick of typical romantic sentiments). Your way of expressing yourself is uninhibited & a little abstract, but easy to follow & understand (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[pearl]

Thank you so much! I wrote this piece for my Creative Writing class and I'm so glad that you like it! Sending you all my love!

[Einstein Noodle]

ohhhhhhhhhhh this is so romantic .. this line just kills me "He rests with the fish, embracing her cool tranquility" ..i love the blending of nature with lovers .. it is flawless in this poem says i .. the flow so smooth i glide right along with them ... your character descriptions is so creative and unique .. i like this poem a lot .. thank you for sharing Pearl! :)
E.

[pearl]

Thank you so much for appreciating my poem!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

damn great love story here...she, the hesitant bumblebee looking for a safe place to land---he the eagle spreading his wings to embrace her...to protect her, to make sure she knows her worth...
reminding her that he would dive to the greatest depths or soar to the greatest heights to be with her.
j.

[pearl]

This is exactly the thought of the poem! Thank you so much :)))

[Vertigo Cat1111]

I love good imagery in a poem, and this has some of the best! It was very mind-blowing and breathtaking, the way you put everything. I really hope I get to see more writing from you!

[pearl]

Thank you so much!!

[gabby]

Chescake!!! wow. taylor swift who? i only know you HAHAAHAH this poem is so captivating, your words really pulled me in. it is well written, and your imagery is so vivid, it made me imagine. i love how delicate and creative your words are. It was a merge of abstract ideas which really hits the feels. oh, to have a guy like him. i can tell that this poem means a lot to you and i can see you through the elegance and grace that this poem portrays. proud of you! :)

[Juancheeto]

When ma'am said to use imagery, imagery you used indeed HAHAHAHAH. This is a very polished poem that came straight from the heart of the writer. I feel as if the last stanza of your poem is directly connected due to the fact that your username is "pearl", and that the boy here is supposed to represent "the one" for the pearl. Despite the poem being full of imagery, you can still tell what exactly the poem is all about, and I believe that is what makes a poem a poem; illusive yet straight to the point at the same time. Overall I believe the poem is very good and uses a lot of imagination when it comes to reading through the lines.

[Notedge]

your poem has good wording and it is a great example for imagery because of the vivid picture you are painting in my head. KEEP IT UP!!

[mariposa]

I love how you wrote this poem with elegance and grace. I specifically love how you connoted the guy as the flower because a flower is usually looked at as being feminine, let's go and cancel toxic masculinity

[Geean]

Great choice of words, especially the adjectives used. The way you described everything was very accurate. You have a nice vocabulary. The poem was also very easy to follow and to visualize to the point where I did not have to re-read something just to have a better understanding of it. The flow of the poem is really smooth and fluid. Overall, its a great piece.

[Ysa]

Your piece right here is WOWZERS! Very elegant, delicate, colorful in vocab and imagery, complex yet simple too! There is little to say for me here hehe. Amazing piece!

[Lachimolala]

Great choice of words, and I love how you made up this poem because of the imaginations :)