Who Am I

this poem is about who i am .. and what i think of myself as!!

who am i ??

i am a blank canvious

im  which

the artist

God

can create

call me names

i wash it off as though

i am nothing but air

cant see me ?

i can see you !

flowing through your hair

feel the breeze

of my heart

i am a mirror

staired into

like i have many answers

to quesions

i do not know

understand me by not what you see

but what you feel

judge me by not what you assume

yet by what you know

i am in your imagination

blank as can be

write in me

like i am a diary

trust me for the words i speak

and none other

take my hand ?

do not follow me i said!

do not lead my path

instead

walk beside me

like my friend

i am as deep as space

only known by some

thought of by many others

hold my heart

never drop it !!!

Author's Note

go ahead ... speak your mind !!!

Reviews

[bluessadmood]

my God this is so nice
lovely tender words ,so dreamy ,so deep,so lovely
cant see me ?
i can see you !
flowing through your hair
feel the breeze
of my heart
understand me by not what you see

but what you feel
judge me by not what you assume
yet by what you know
i am in your imagination
blank as can be
write in me
like i am a diary
trust me for the words i speak
and none other
take my hand ?
do not follow me i said!
do not lead my path
oh though some spelling errors ,and some editing needed,but your writing is so sweet and tender words ,i loved all ,so romantic
this is wonderful,you have it in you,such talent i see,lovely every word ,like a song,wonderful

[Veralily]

"cant see me ?
i can see you !
flowing through your hair
feel the breeze
of my heart
i am a mirror
staired into
like i have many answers
to quesions
i do not know"

Very playful. I like it. It's something and everything.

~Veralily

[.]

a beautiful piece
it seems like a song (a rap one)

i like these lines:

i am nothing but air
cant see me ?
i can see you !
flowing through your hair

i'll look forward to read more of your works

:)

[Ian]

It's good, I liked this part:

do not follow me i said!
do not lead my path
instead
walk beside me
like my friend
i am as deep as space
only known by some

Good write! =)
Keep adding stuff

[Eagle Cruagh]

Beautiful example for the Stream of Consciousness.

An expression of talent that is inescapable.

The only suggestion from this reader is , use your
spell check. When you have finished writing try to
force yourself to edit your writing, you will find
errors the average reader will probably not notice, but
you will feel better for haviing corrected them.

This writing shows a monumental talent, a wonderous
ability and superlative use of the language.

A pleasure to read.

Thank you !

----- Eagle Cruagh

[Rose Kavanagh]

Not bad, I like it!
It flows really well and (though I'm not a poetry expert) it seemed to be quite well-written.
Good job!

[Rogerramjat]

geeze your talented and intense poem reflective

[cade]

this is a good piece,it flows well.