Smoking kills

It is said that smoking kills

and if you smoke you may be knowing

that you can have cancer

but then why don't you keep your cigarette down ?

come on , give me an answer 

I know it's difficult when you are giving up on something

it's not easy

but you can keep trying

or soon you'll be dying

Stop buying those deadly pipes, cigarettes and cigars

those tiny 4 to 5 inched cigarettes 

can be poisonous for your lungs

so remember instead of drinking cigarettes 

live a longer life by giving up on them

Hundreds of people die every year because of smoking.Smoking causes cancer.smoking kills.

Reviews

[Tazeen Ahmed]

The rhyming here adds a great flow to this poem!
Yes, smoking can snatched away your life and decrease your life span...
People oft smoke thinking that look cool or when they want to forget their sorrows..
A great write:)

[Urja Gokani]

thanks a lot :)

[barleygirl]

The damage that smoking does to our bodies is immense! I'm so glad I never got into that bad habit which is hard to break. You're giving an interesting pep talk here, very convincing, & showing all the ways smoking is harmful. I disagree with one of your other reviewers in that cigarettes & cigars are very different. I agree that "drinking cigarettes" sounds weird. Maybe drinking in the smoke would be more understandable.

[Urja Gokani]

ok thanks a lot :)

[Collyn]

The format of the poem is interesting. Make sure you capitalize each line of the poem. It needs a little fixing up. Also, cigarettes and cigars are the same thing, and you said "drinking cigarettes" which is confusing me...

[Urja Gokani]

thanks for the review bit i didnt know what to write so i wrote drinking do you know a word to replace that ?

[Collyn]

smoking? indulging in cigarettes?

[Urja Gokani]

ok thanks i'll see whats best and will change it thanks for the help :)

[HippieSoulPunx]

Nicely written, and an excellent message. I've never understood why people want to do something so bad for you when it doesn't give you anything in return.

[Urja Gokani]

thanks !!!!

[Archos]

I appreciate and admire your effort to point out the problem, which is so widespread, but if I can give you a little advice, it could go more viral if you polished it a little more.

[Urja Gokani]

ok thanks for your great advice and i am sure to put a lot of effort in my next poem thanks for the advice and the review and do you know i made you won the contest because i invented the contest that you won today so congrats for that :)