life journey

life starts when you are born

some born in a rich family

some in a poor one's

but that does not matter

it's about how you live it

it's about how you dream it

it's about the words that you speak

some people live it like

it's the last day 

some people live it like

a bird they fly

some people complete their dreams 

some people let it go

some people are reborn for that

we get older and older

then our kids weigh on our shoulder

their happiness in ours

their sorrows in ours

but as time passes 

we loose them they go to someone else 

we miss the happiness and the sorrows too

we live till we don't get a free ticket to heaven

we get weaker and weaker 

and we loose our breaths 

we loose our souls

and we die

but before dying the memories flash in our mind

and after dying we get a message from our family

while we get buried 

we get their tear drops on our coffins 

they dry but not their love

new roses and tear drops

come on the soil which cover the coffins

it's so emotional it makes us cry

but you can't come back to life 

to see them for the last time

to hug them tight

this ends our life's journey 

Author's Note

this the longest poem i have ever written i am so excited i hope you all like it
- cherryblossom

Reviews

[Khristian Breakenridge]

Nice poem. It is definatly a different stylle to what i am customed to, but message was well delivered, i just wish it was more sensitive. Kind of seems a little cold, but you could have been aiming for that so if you were well done

[Urja Gokani]

thanks a lot

[zaisham9393]

A meaningful and thought provoking poem depicting different lifestyles along with the stages of life.

[Urja Gokani]

thanks a lot

[Troy Henson]

An important thing for us all to remember is that our children are on loan only for a short time. Live life with them while we can and embrace everyday like it's our last. There is no price for the time we have on earth and to share our lives with the ones that we love is priceless.

Whether rich or poor shouldn't matter. Life should not be lived as materialistic. In short materialistic items can be replaced where we can not be.

this was great.

[Urja Gokani]

thanks a lot

[Bhumika Devkota]

This is a really good poem, your best so far in my opinion. It has an amazing view to it. But I also think that begin born in a rich or poor family affects your life. Like if you are born in a rich family, you have a lot more support while if you are from a really really poor, sometimes you have no choice but to let go because your family doesn't have enough money. Anyway this is a really good poem.

[Urja Gokani]

thanks a lot i was shocked when you said "my best poem so far"

[Bhumika Devkota]

You are welcome, it's the best I have read from you.