Love Me, For Real

True story.

Love Me, For Real

It was only about my face

Or was it some sick thrilling race?

 

Not love.

 

You held me in your arms

Told me I was safe from harm

 

I felt safe.

 

Your hands were on ablaze

My skin, they graze

 

I didn’t like this.

 

You had planned

To make me your one night stand

 

But no, this was the end of you and I.

 

I’m hurt and broken

But I was just a token.

 

Just a prize.

 

Just another girl

Not the special pearl

 

I thought I was.

Author's Note

True story, this was about an ex of mine. He left me pretty hurt.

Reviews

[Drako]

ah heartbreak. it's a pain that hurts so much i swear i'd prefer physical pain. the idea that you weren't special to this person you've grown to love always hurts. it really sucks if you find out you're supposed to have been a one night stand. that's like adding insult to injury. i can certainly relate to this poem

[Midday_Mystery]

I am crying, some person who would ever treat any woman like that knows not the love of God nor the True meaning of love. I feel bad for you that it happened, because It never should happen to a wonderful person, I also pray that one day God will Touch his soul, so that He will repent of this wrongness and become the man God wants Him to be. This was a very good poem with a very well writ message. Excellent Job Chelsey 100/100

[trainwreck]

Heartbreak hurts. For real. I'm sorry you had to go through it.

[A Risen Heroine.]

..I sure can relate... this hurt as hell.. My ex Damien did so..
This is pretty much how I felt, and I think you expressed it very well!
Thank you for sharing and wonderful job!!

~A Fallen Heroine~

[Sunflower 20]

everyone deserves to feel special, and its terrible when that one person you thought you trusted turns their back on you.
You expressed the emotions of heartbreak in such simple words. i thought this line was brillian:

"Just another girl
Not the special pearl"

I thought I was.

well done and i hope you find someone who treats you the way you deserve to be treated :)

[iamkim]

Uh-oh! Such a pain in the a*s :(( I love the way how you wrote it, very nice! Full of hurt and pain. I felt it when I read the poem.

[Midnight_Mystery]

i think most girls can definatly relate to this, great write :)

[sentimental~ galore]

i am sorry first of all, not that thats going to make it better but i am sure you'll find someone better...life is young. but about the poem it was short and painful...and i liked the last part...just another girl, not the special pearl, i thought i was. and just let you know your probably going to be special pearl for someone else, he just wasn't the right guy. he couldn't see the great person you are.

[Coyote Poetry]

Sometime we learn the hard way how the people really are. Best to leave them behind and add it as a lesson of life. I tell people. Slow and easy. Good things take time. A easy gift is never appreciated. A sad poem with some wisdom in the words. A excellent poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[Sweet & Tender Hooligan]

We all hope for love that is real and true. When it doesn't turn out that way it can make us go through the pain and heartache described in your poem. Some of the wording is angry and trite but apart from that this is a poem many people can relate to in some ways.

[Jūdan FyreHeart]

This didn't have any flow at all. It jumped around making it hard to try and read it smoothly.
Some of the word usage also didn't make sense -
"Your hands were on ablaze"
You mean - "Your hands were ablaze" I assume. There's no need for the on, it doesn't make any sense.

I think I can see what you were trying to do, alternating the stanzas but it felt too sharp and didn't come together properly. The emotion is clearly there but the structure itself needs work.