Prologue: The Man I Am

Prologue: The Man I Am

A magazine lies upon the sidewalk. I pick up its crumpled self and flip it open to the first page. The page is of a family.

They are sitting upon a couch, glued to the television. The Mom and Dad are cuddled into a knot; their hands are entwined in a loving embrace. Their children, with mirrored faces of the parents, are sitting in perfect harmony.

My hand grips the paper, crumpling this sweet picture. Just like my perfect family was.

 

Reviews

[robyn.alexandra]

A straightforward and simple start that sets the mind racing.
So many possible routes you could take this, you have a very different way of approaching it than I would and don't get caught up in the pointless details and heaps of description, you keep it bare and stripped back and catch the reader so easily.

[akapr17other]

Very interesting prologue (interesting in a good way). It makes the reader want to keep reading.

[Coyote Poetry]

A very strong beginning to the story. I will read the next chapter. Thank you.
Coyote

[Michael.]

I'll admit it did get me interested even though I wasn't a big fan of the voice.

[trainwreck]

Great start. It really draws the reader in. I'm officially interested.

[Rose Masen]

This was mind boggling! I hope you write more!! I loved how you just cut it off so raw-like!

[Eric]

I pretty much agree with robyn.wilson. Great job.

I'm excited to see where this story will go.

[Marie Harrison]

Very interesting choice for a prologue. I am interested in reading more. Sometime prologues bore me.

[Silvario]

short, simple and to the point. a nice little establishing bit. way to set the scene, nicely done :)

[Jim Parson]

You have a very abrupt, matter-of-fact style that works to grab the readers attention. This is a nice opening, getting the reader's interest immediately and preparing them to settle in for more.

[Steve]

Sweet! I look forward to more..