Beneath the Umbrella

A poem between the sky and a girl!

Beneath the Umbrella

Rain pounds the streets

Blue marker, streaking the black clouds

Puddles pooling upon the pavement

 

Beneath the umbrella

My sobs, colour my face in salty lines

My heart hacked by chainsaws

 

This girl

Her eyes leak stories

I’m going to shine my light

 

Beneath my umbrella

I’m blinded by this light

I reach for it, claiming it mine

Author's Note

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Reviews

[littlelilypurplebride]

still feel this needs more but i love these first lines and your last lines.
beneath the umbrella
Rain pounds the streets
Blue marker, streaking
the black clouds Puddles
pooling upon the pavement

Beneath my umbrella
I'm blinded by this light
I reach for it, claiming it mine

now this line confuses me My heart hacked by chainsaws every thing else makes sense but it could just be me on that line. god bless lily

[hannajade]

I like the imagery and how you used your words. You really are a brilliant poet, Chelsea!

[tynamite]

I like this one. I like the contrast between the rain falling, her crying; and the umbrella. The umbrella seems a bit symbolic in a way, like it's an object, and the girl's strength to carry on. I've favourited it.

[Becky Lawrence]

This is a great poem, I enjoyed it a lot. It has a nice ending, to me it sounded positive and determined. Keep up the awesome work!

[akapr17other]

Excellent poem! We Seattleites know our way around an umbrella;)

[GrandDystopia]

Nice, at first i thought this was gonna be one of your "sting in the tail" poems but as always you suprise me and pull out a hopefull ending.
I liked this, keep up the always good work:)