Sky Sorrows

A fun poem about rolls in the night. Rolls of humanity------

Sky Sorrows

The sky is lit with twinkling stars

Their shiny pale eyes.....

Are emphasized with shimmering eye shadows

Shadowed with shimmering shades of crimson

They flit across the black screen

 

The moon is shining

Ever so brightly this dark gloomy night

Lacerated, with dents, bruises, indentations,

Upon its smooth creamy top

Speckles of black smother its splendour

Dirt.

Author's Note

Does anybody get my message? Take a guess----

Reviews

[Cynthia]

Wow, I love how you make readers guess the message behind the poem! Its really amazing, I love the way you have told the whole story. So... let me guess... I was bit of affected by the reviews below, and yes, it looks like vampire and werewolves, besides, when will you reveal your answer? I want to know!

[Dani]

Interesting piece. I can't say for sure what my interpretation is - to be honest I'm just not all that good at figuring poetry out, as much as I love writing it - but it was a good piece, regardless. I like the style.

Great write.

[Rose Masen]

A life ending? Or maybe being buried alive- because of the mentioning of dirt? Interesting indeed.

[Steph's_romantic_myster..]

I love the poem, but the symbolism lost me on this one... I will have to analize this further and re review not gonna rate till I do

[Calypso]

Very nice. I take it to mean a grave, but that's what I think. Well written and cute.

[Silvario]

this IS a fun poem :) love the word choice here, especially in the first verse with the repeating s-h's. very pretty sounding when you read it aloud.

hmm ... never been one for interprating poetry. what i see in the second verse is; despite being scarred the moon is still able to shine brightly, even when things are gloomy. and so the message could be that we, too, can shine bright and find happiness even in the darkest of times, even from under the harshest of scars.
*shrugs*

either way. i liked it! =)

[OT]

hmm lots of interpretations - the walk home after a night out haha make up smeared - the stars being them - covered in make-up/dirt - bruises - sullied stars perhaps!! nice!! the second stanza is great!! (change they're to their in second line and it's to its in second stanza and perfect)

[TheFemininePad]

Wow what an interesting poem. Had me confused with it. I had to read it several times to try to understand what you meant. It sounds like your describing a vampire in the first few lines, and the second set of lines could be describing werewolves. I hope I'm right. I'm going to feel very stupid if I'm wrong lol. I think you did a great job here. It made me really think.