Baby Bird

Story of many baby birds.

Baby Bird

Woven into a nest

Tucked deep into your mother’s breast

 

Wind tosses you

 

Upon the ground

Waiting to be found

 

Your mother flies away

 

You fought

But you now rot

Author's Note

I don't know what to think of this. Please review!

Reviews

[Amanda Dawn Sanderson-G..]

This is sad but the honest truth. I found a baby bird once that had wonder quite far from it's own fallen tree and attempted to care for it until it was capable of caring for itself... but he died through the night and I felt so down about not being able to save him from his fate of death because of a fallen mishap. I enjoyed it because I connected with it... and I like a short poem with deep meanings, it's very good.

[Gone]

Thats so sad. been birdwatching in the garden with my grandchildren today so the sadness of this poem really hit me. However this poem could also be about parental rejection. Another good write Chelsea.

[Steph's_romantic_myster..]

Great content and good symbolism, but where is the depth. Your poem is inconsistent. It started out with a good tempo and rhyming scheme, then all of a sudden it lost it... A good poem, but needs a little more attention. I hope I was helpful

[Karli]

That's soooo sad!!! Good way of showing the situation, though. But so sad!:(

[SOUL LESS]

Precise...and deadly. Its a nice poem i suppose.

[OT]

a nice dark piece! a sad observation of the cruelty and bittersweet touch of nature!

[Kelsie Eileen Stark]

Life can be happiness, but I guess as we look closer at this, it can also be sad....Great job!

[Arizona Sky]

O.O
Rot? Haha...that's sad but I guess is very true.

[GrandDystopia]

Wow! I actually found this quite dark, i'm not sure if that was your intention but i think it worked.
Great stuff as always:)

[MuSe Ampoule]

harsh but true observation. keenly done.