Saved

Being saved by God.

Saved

The strangling
grips of death.

Have me.
 
Nooses tighten.
 
I’m in a car, speeding down the highway to hell
about to crash.
 
Once and for all.
No return.
 
Jesus pushes me away
from danger;

 
He takes the pain.
Eases the ache.

 

He saved me.

He saves me

everyday.

Author's Note

Many thanks to Serial Kisser who helped me with editing---- Please review :)

Reviews

[Amanda Dawn Sanderson-G..]

First, I'd like to say that I agree with Stephen, it'd be a great dramatic touch and would keep the flow you have by breaking down the sentence 'I'm in a car, speeding down the highway to hell'... and I'll agree his suggestion was perfect.

Other than that, the poem was great. I liked how death had a tight grip on your life, as like a noose around the neck... yet no matter what death put you through, Jesus was there to save you - ease your pain. I loved this and this is what I imagine happens to those that don't make in car crashes... I believe Jesus comes to save us from the pain and agony.

[inside unknown]

i love the message of this poem, and the alusion to the song, but the first two lines sound like yoda.. i would suggest changing the second line to "are the grips of death" unless the structure prohibits it.

[Steph's_romantic_myster..]

Your poem is very inspiring and right on. The only suggestion I can make is to make the long sentence into three smaller lines:
I’m in a car
speeding down
the highway to hell

Like that, add a dramic touch to the poem, and keeps your natural tempo flowing... Excellent piece

[littlelilypurplebride]

yes Jesus Yeshua is a great mender he can mend even broken hearts. love this god bless lily

[J Michael Simmonds]

Pretty Cool analogy. I like this one a lot. Nice work Chels

[Karli]

absolutely PERFECT flow, first of all. It completely explains how our Savior is so amazing. Great emotion. Most of all, though, amazing flow:)

[Charity]

I TOTALLY AGREE WITH THIS! Jesus saves us in so many ways that we don't even ever discover...

[Gone]

Short and to the point. You are saying it like it is. Good job.

[A Risen Heroine.]

wow, I like the imagery with Jesus, yes Jesus helps all of us! :D
Great write!
Keep up the good work and thanks for sharing :3

~A Fallen Heroine~

[GrandDystopia]

Great imagery, you show admireable passion in this subject.
Nice work

[Moflo]

I think you use some very strong imagery to capture both sides of the conflict in this poem, and it comes out very clear and profound. Good work.