First, I'd like to say that I agree with Stephen, it'd be a great dramatic touch and would keep the flow you have by breaking down the sentence 'I'm in a car, speeding down the highway to hell'... and I'll agree his suggestion was perfect.
Other than that, the poem was great. I liked how death had a tight grip on your life, as like a noose around the neck... yet no matter what death put you through, Jesus was there to save you - ease your pain. I loved this and this is what I imagine happens to those that don't make in car crashes... I believe Jesus comes to save us from the pain and agony.
A powerful poem with a good message. Death can be easy. Life is very hard. But sometime the good things can make up for the bad. A excellent poem.
Coyote
First, I'd like to say that I agree with Stephen, it'd be a great dramatic touch and would keep the flow you have by breaking down the sentence 'I'm in a car, speeding down the highway to hell'... and I'll agree his suggestion was perfect.
Other than that, the poem was great. I liked how death had a tight grip on your life, as like a noose around the neck... yet no matter what death put you through, Jesus was there to save you - ease your pain. I loved this and this is what I imagine happens to those that don't make in car crashes... I believe Jesus comes to save us from the pain and agony.
Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance.
- Carl Sandburg
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