Death Drawings

A poem about suicidal thoughts.

Death Drawings

You sit, away in a corner

Alone, away from the lively

Huddled into awkward knots, you are

As if you were trying to contain yourself

From what? I’m unsure of.

You etch upon, a virgin sheet of paper

With a black inked pen

With a shaky hand and a fierce look

I see pictures of death

Raping the paper

I realize, this is what you want

To take a final breath.

 

 

Author's Note

I tried to write about those suffering from the pressures of suicide. So dedicatd for anybody going through this---- Please tell me how I did & any thoughts on the topic of suicide?

Reviews

[Writer *78*]

Very dark and well written. You captured the essance of this very well. So many people go through thinking to themselves if they should commit suicide, but I can tell you that going there and actually going through with it are two totally different ordeals. I myself have thought about it, but havent gone through with it. I keep thinking when I'm alone there has to be something out there that is better than the way I'm living. Granted I have my family for support, but I still wonder will it ever get better? Eventually, it does because you realize what is important in one's life. Again very well written as goes for the rest of your pieces.

[Zane]

Very good write. It was really dark, and it made me think. Good job.

[Call Me Blu]

Not much I can say that hasn't been said, it is dark, mysterious and very well written, good job

[Marie Harrison]

Dark and mysterious. I love it!

[PrincessZeldaWannabe]

Really strong and dark! Awesome job! And I think suicide should be talked about more, especially since teens are committing it more then ever. If people in school just realize that you have to treat people with respect, then the rates would drop!

[T. J. Blackburn]

Love the imagery. Good job.

[Coyote Poetry]

Suicide is touchy subject. A lot of people uses alcohol and drugs to find safety also. I could feel the pain and desire to find a unknown peace. A very good poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[Kat24]

Hi,
This is really good. Kat24

[Kate Hunter]

dang. That totally made drawing look criminal.
I guess i'll think twice next time I pick up a pencil1

[Nothing Personal]

Very Interesting topic. I mean I liked your take on the subject.