Dance

Poem about dances.

Dance

This beat pumps through the gymnasium

Lights bounce about,

Red, green, orange, all colours

They flash upon the glittered eyes of the girls

My dress, fits tightly again my body

Does I catch your eyes, men?

Bodies pack the gym.

DJ, spin that s**t,

I venture to the floor, steps in time with the beat

Let’s shake it, get down

There she goes!

Grab the hands of the ones on the sidelines

The ones to shy to let their hair down

Show them how to move, how to groove

Throw your head back, laughing

Enjoy the moment, it’s one to remember

Let’s make it a night!

Reviews

[SOUL LESS]

You almost made me picture it...almost. I never had much of an imagination. :) But still as sum1 put it:
we must be prudent in the words we select to express our feelings and experiences. Inspiration is always there waiting for us. The candle flame continually beckons; but we must carefully interpret how its flickering rhythm chants.

Work on the structure.

[Poetic Beauty]

It is always fun to get out and dance. I haven't done that for ages but I do pop in my ear buds and when no one is home but me dance around the house doing dishes or whatever else I need to do.

[Anatomical Grip]

dancing is so much fun :) great piece..

[Margaret Marie Hubbard]

Sounds like you did indeed enjoy the moment. :)

[Kate Hunter]

nice job.
We had a dance similar to that last yea, only it was a blacklight dance.

[sarah]

This is so great it is wonderful that you could put this into a poem and remember this night forever

[HopelesslyDevoted]

super high energy poem! love it!

[Gone]

This is a fun piece of writing and I agree with E.H. Monroe except the expletive ;)

[hannajade]

was this the one at AC?
that was so fun:)
I like this, alot, its really fun to read and makes me smile:)

[E.H. Monroe]

I enjoy the simplicity.
I think I enjoy the typos, because its high school so f**k it, go with it. If it was meant, it works, if not, still does.
I saw this less as a poem and more as a split second of random thoughts that go through your head in between the second that it takes to get to the floor.
and im not even a dancer. Obviously you can always rewrite and rework, I just think it was meant to be fun and a good way to say f**k it. Just like the message in it.

DJ spin that s**t indeed

[underwriter]

nice write. maybe work a little on the rhythem..? help it to flow a bit more, like the dancing.
keep it up!