Ride of a Lifetime

Pedal stroke at a time. Endless, the race seems. Yet, I succeed.

Ride of a Lifetime

My first pedal strokes

Frantic, in hopes of staying seated

Ground, I did cover

A few feet of  endless joy

Yet, I do fall

Scraping my elbows, bloody mess

Hopes fallen,

I get back on

The saddle,

And ride on,

On……

& on……

Until I get going.

Author's Note

I enjoy bike riding. So decided to write a poem about biking/life. Please review.

Reviews

[Gone]

Nice little poem. So true of life in general too. We have been teaching our Grandaughter to ride her bike recently so it is fresh in my memory. I completely agree with T. J. Blackbern. He has some good advice. Also take a look at his work, it is very good.

[Theodore]

Something simple but great, looking forward to reading more...

[T. J. Blackburn]

YES! Applause on style and use of punctuation. The pacing makes me feel the motion of peddling and covering ground on a bike.

Suggestions:

A few feet of seemingly endless joy [don't qualify your endless joy]

However I get back on [stronger without]

Thank you for the experience

[Kelsie Eileen Stark]

You have creative ways of writing- and what you write about.
Great job.

[Poetic Beauty]

This is a great short piece about learning to write a bike.

[hannajade]

this made me think of the first I rode my bike with trainer wheels on! (I managed to stay on until I tried turning lol) and I love how its sort a like life.... nice one!!

[PrincessZeldaWannabe]

Really peaceful and pretty!

[HopelesslyDevoted]

fantasticly written lovin it