His Canvas

His canvas, empty. Filled day by day. Seven days, your work complete!

His Canvas

God’s canvas, empty

Creating scenery. Detail by detail. All perfection.

Slippery slopes, shimmering bodies of waters. You create land.

You fling the moon and sun into your skies; creating light

Splatter painting he does; spilling shiny stars

Darkened clouds painted about; fluffy white ones to go with.

Blowing to dry your painting. You breathe life.

You sweep the paintbrush across; animals following your lead

You work each face; feature by feature. A masterpiece each one of us are.

Satisfaction, you achieve. Your dear painting.

 

Author's Note

I was reading my bible and was struck by the thought of God creating the world. I know this poem will never live up to that but hey, I tried!
Please tell me what you think! Thank you :)

Reviews

[Writer *78*]

One word that comes to mind is humanity. You see a lot of that here with the words used in this poem. The imagery is once again fantastic. Each line flowing with the other. I could see this expanded a little more, maybe add in a line with the forests and deserts. Just a suggestion. Yet again another great piece of work.

-Writer *78*

[JanieB]

Wow..this is such powerful poem.
Excellent write!

[Moflo]

I do like the lowercase "you," you replace God's name with and I wonder if that says that we are all in charge of what we see on God's canvass. If it does, I love it, if it doesn't, I still love it because you really explore an interesting idea of how tedious it must have been to create the universe! Strong poem!

[Greg Skura]

Nice analogy you have created here! And yes everything and everyone is unique and individual! Well Done!

[tynamite]

I think it's great how God created the world so beautiful and artistic.

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

I thought of God as an artist when I spent time up in the mountains.
I remember watching the sun rise and wondering if it was at all humanly
possible to capture those amazing colors. It was the only time in my life
that I had no problems getting up early..lol.

Your poem is amazing and personal to me. :)

[Ashley Myers]

very pretty. we ARE Gods canvas. And whats funny is that the way he paints us is not by accident, or by "what happens happens" or spontainiously. he knew us before we were born. he knows more about us than we do. And every one of us is HIS perfect purposeful painting!!!

[Coyote Poetry]

I like how you described the world being create. In the hands of a artist the world was made to be beautiful. Great description and story in the poem. A outstanding poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[The Raven King]

A purely visual poem. I really liked this piece. You had very good descriptive diction throughout. My only suggestion is that the term "slippery slope" has connotation that you probbaly did not mean to convey.

[T. J. Blackburn]

I like. I can picture a painter painting a world. Only thing I could think of is that you began in 3rd person then switched to 2nd. Stick to one and make it stronger.

[Anatomical Grip]

great piece...