Broken Promise

My parents promise= broken.

Broken Promise

You cradled my infant self in your arms

Endeared by the miracle of birth; the birth of your daughter

But obviously I didn’t mean much

Your street life meant more

More than me! Your daughter!

More than being my parents

You were my knights in shining armour

You armour lost all shine; it’s crumpled in pieces

Your promise to be there,

Was broken,

But I never asked for this; you made the choice

You lost me and I lost you

Our lives no longer intertwine,

I can’t tell you my dreams

You’ll never know my sadness

You won’t be able to contribute any happiness to me

You can’t be in my life and I can’t be in your life

I don’t know you; you don’t know me

We are strangers; should have been a mighty team

Maybe one day our paths will cross,

But for now we live different lives

I’m growing up and becoming a young woman

Your just you, a failed specimen of a person.

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

This is a 100% true. I lost my parents at four because of their choice of street life. Drugs, prostitution, etc….. But I wrote this to get all my feeling out. I know it was along time, but I still wonder why they did it. They chose street life OVER ME! Their own daughter, they gave me up. This has puzzled me for years. But I’ve decided that they loved me, but only as much as they could. Because of their screwed up lives and bad choices maybe they thought giving me up was the only way. But it still hurts knowing your parents did this. Partly because parents are supposed to care for you and be there for you. And yet they did this to me. But I think writing this out has been good healing. So please review.

Reviews

[Call Me Blu]

If you ever read the book crank I think, it is like this, but from the s****y mothers point of view. It then moves on to glass and fallout, I think that you would enjoy these books, I did. And it is sad it is true, but maybe they did it because they knew that they were giving you a better life, that they didn't want you to have to grow up with them as parents.

[Warren L.G De Mills]

Wow.....this really hit me even b4 i read that its a true personal life story. you brought this one to the reader and the reader really feels like he feels for you here. you should try to make that feeling bleed out into all ur writing, its pretty effective. you didnt hold anything back either, pretty cold and harsh and raw. fitting for such a topic

[Ashley Myers]

wow. i know what you mean. idk if you listen to country music but theres a song by kelly pickler, i think its called i wonder, about her mom leaving her and stuff, its a sad song but it touches your heart. Me and my two brothers were adopted. my mom stopped all contact with us when i was 5 and my dad was only in and out for holidays. no phone calls, cards, birthday presents, nothing. when i was 18 i started talking to my dad but he still didnt care about me as his daughter. i was just another friend of his that he could use and toss out to the trash when he was done and i just met up with my real mom this past year and shes so messed upi from drugs and alcohol she couldnt even answer questions that i had for her. what sucks is i remember everything from being with my real parents. abuse, neglect, filthy living conditions, my moms alcoholism, my dads prostitutes. it was bad and the thing is, the kids suffer far more than they will ever know. Your poem really speaks to me and others in our situation. i love it its so powerful

[Kat24]

Hi,
This is very interesting. Kat24

[Moflo]

Very great emotions coming out of this. You can tell this poem came strait from your heart and that is a great way to write. Poetry is a great way to vent out your emotions, and that's how the best poems are written. Great write.

[Jim Parson]

As a father, I can't image this. You deserved so much better, but look at the person you've become as a result. I know it must be so hard, but it's all part of God's plan to give you a better life. Your pain is emotionally and beautifully portrayed in your writing.

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[Writer *78*]

Usually when Im upset I write about a situation that I am going through or may think about from time to time. If I tend to write a poem, I call them "thoughts on paper, or emotions on paper." I would catagorize your poem as one of those. I cant believe going through what you have gone through. I honestly can not live without my parents for they are the reason I am here. I am sorry for what your parents did to you at a young age, no one should ever go through that. All I can say is that you are a much stronger person for going through this and the example is how much emotion you put into this piece. Very well written. Great work!

-Fredric Cilbrith III

[G. K. Bostic]

I think you're right....they loved you as much as they were able, but their sickness was stronger....and I know that doesn't lessen your pain. It hurts just as much, no matter what the reason. There are two lines in your poem that I think speak most to the loss... "I can’t tell you my dreams
You’ll never know my sadness" That leaves a void that only others with a similar experience can understand.

[underwriter]

*sniff sniff* ok i asked for honest gut wrenching emotions, and wow, there we have it! you brought a tear to my eye (no seriously, you did), i can imagine this must have been hard to write, but well done you for being brave enough to do it! it is simply wonderful!! sad. but wonderful! im sorry for all you have been through.
very well done.

[deeps]

so sad, not sure where or how to review