A Sad State
A Poem by Chelsea
 Senyru about a broken heart. 
A Sad State
You left me behind
My heart lacerated
Way beyond Repair
© 2010 Chelsea
Author's Note
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A senryu, my first attempt! Thanks to my friend on here (Marie Harrison) who taught me how to write these! Please review.
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very good job!
Posted 13 Years Ago
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Great job! Welcome my friend to the Senyru Slayers!
Posted 13 Years Ago
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nicely done.
I've never tried to write one but this looks good for three lines...
Posted 13 Years Ago
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Very Good Job!
Posted 13 Years Ago
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These senryu's are taking over the website. This poem's very good even if it does have a word I don't know what it means.
Posted 13 Years Ago
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Great job on your first attempt at the ol' 5-7-5 Senryu. Try out the Senryu Slayers group...is fun!
btw..."you left be behind" be/me?
Posted 13 Years Ago
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:( sAd
Posted 13 Years Ago
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this is a sad senryu. great emotion pour into it.
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oh its awesome!! (:
Posted 13 Years Ago
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I dont have any clue what a senryu is, but it sounds nice :D
Great job.
Posted 13 Years Ago
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Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance.
- Carl Sandburg
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