to kill

a chose kill or don't

When do you live forever,

in your dreams,

or in your nightmare.

were do you fell more safe,

at home,

or the place were your love one is,

if you had to chose,

to kill to safe a life,

but in it killing anther,

with every breath you dare take,

anther loses one,

so tell me,

would you kill to safe a life?

 

Reviews

[NinjaPi]

A very heavy question. In the lines "to kill to safe a life" and the last line you use the word "safe" instead of "save". You have also made quite a few punctuation mistakes. I suggest either using correct punctuation or none at all (execpt for question and exclamation marks). I think the idea behind this is very strong. With a bit of work you will have a great poem.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A tellign piece, would I kill to save a life, well it depepnds on the life really, a complex theory in time, well done, good read.

[Midnight_Mask]

Brilliant ideas and amazingly written, I've written a lot of poems, but yet this one poem has exceeded all of mine. I can't wait for you to write more and hope you do.
Also, it seems you've been listening too much 30 seconds to mars Hurricane xP but I get my inspiration from songs too, good work and great write ^^