heart got broken
A Poem by
chelsea
best one yet :)
My heart got broken,
nothing else to say,
the words not spoken
not now any way.
my life in pieces,
like shattered glass,
to scared to move
to scared to talk,
you lose your self,
in the dark.
the death of many,
but some live on,
my heart got broken,
nothing more.
© 2011 chelsea
Reviews
I can relate, so many times. You've done amazing to make the hairs on my arms prickle. I especially love the way you didn't make it rhyme too much except in the beginning lines, the way you make it halt before continuing creates a harsh feeling, emphasizing pain. Great write ^^
Posted 13 Years Ago
WHen this happens, what the hell can the soul say to comfort? Powerful! xx
Posted 13 Years Ago
WHen this happens, what the hell can the soul say to comfort? Powerful! xx
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
A good rhythm in your poem :D I like your metaphor "My life in pieces like shattered glass" :)
Posted 13 Years Ago
A good rhythm in your poem :D I like your metaphor "My life in pieces like shattered glass" :)
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
Borderline cliche and the to should be too, but nevertheless you capture it both universally and personally in a way I can relate to… Thanks for sharing!
Posted 13 Years Ago
Borderline cliche and the to should be too, but nevertheless you capture it both universally and personally in a way I can relate to… Thanks for sharing!
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
you have a great flow to your writing! A lot of times, worse than the hurtful things we say to each other, are the words we leave unsaid. Keep it up!
Just a technical note... should be *too* scared
Posted 13 Years Ago
you have a great flow to your writing! A lot of times, worse than the hurtful things we say to each other, are the words we leave unsaid. Keep it up!
Just a technical note... should be *too* scared
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
i don't know about this poem :/
Posted 13 Years Ago
i don't know about this poem :/
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chelsea london, none, United Kingdom
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