((One Can Only Hope))

You're a missed call on my phone
((I didn't see your name until well after midnight))
You didn't leave a message
((Yours always ramble anyway))
We haven't talked for weeks
((You always touch my arm when you pass by, though))
So, why is it you call me now?
((And why haven't you called back?))
Have you realized how much the ostracism hurts?
((I still cry sometimes))
Maybe you feel bad
((One can only hope))

Reviews

[Lexy]

This is really cool. Aside from the broken heart, I mean. No pain is cool, but I really like this style.

[Lindsey:)]

Very well written.
The seperated comments made it even better!
Good Job!

[An owl on the moon]

Wonderfully written. A very modern expression of the pain and alientation so common in our world. Love the separated refrains... Well done!

[Roberta Weth]

Thank you taking the time to enter in my contest I came here to wish you luck and say that this is a lovely poem.
~Bobbi

[Richard McLin]

Wonderful, packed with emotion and feeling and with a very interesting style and flow, I loved this piece.

~Richard

[Dog Lover]

I thought this poem was pretty good!!!

[Jessica{is inspired by ..]

I know how this feels. It's weird when you get the cold sholder then they call out of the blue. It just makes it hurt all the more.

You put the feelings into words nicely. Good job on this! I like the (()) around every other line. It looks like your thoughts, not really meant to be heard, but they are there all the same. I myself use (), but I think (()) gives it more emphasis, sometimes people skip right over the (), but you made sure it stuck out, it really worked well here.

You can definitely sense the pain and slight anger in this piece.

Jessica

[Emily Robinson]

I like it.