Desires

They're dangerous.

DESIRES

C. Lee Battaglia

It all starts out with a desire,

But be careful, because it could start a fire,

That grows until it starts to kill,

It may seem as just a thrill,

But it is not so,

The desire is a tight bow,

That wraps around your soul,

And in the end, it will have caused its toll.

Author's Note

Please leave me constructive feedback! Thank you!

Reviews

[conversations with her ..]

this is dope, like seriously.. i visualized what you were saying, this is amazing!

[C. Lee Battaglia]

Thank you so much!

[matpat]

I think your poem is great, it is short and simple but still has meaning. Keep up the good work!

[C. Rose]

Contradictorily, my favorite line is "wrap around your soul" and the line I feel doesn't fit quite right is "a tight bow". The overall feeling is excitement and risk.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are right my friend.
"And in the end, it will have caused its toll."
Everything had a payment. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Valentine]

Perhaps in some relationships but not when it is 2 ways. Valentine Nice rhyming

[C. Lee Battaglia]

Thank you Valentine,
but I was just trying to betray that, everything we do, starts with a desire. We just have to manage those. Yes I agree with you though.
Thank you!

[Valentine]

Did you mean portray ?

[C. Lee Battaglia]

Yes thank you.

[Lola_Bee]

Wow short yet such an impact, Great job. loved the deep message

[C. Lee Battaglia]

Thank you Lola! I do appreciate it.