There She Stood

There She Stood

A Story by C. Lee Battaglia
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Another story...

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There She Stood
Written by: C. Lee Battaglia



CHAPTER 1

You could say I'm not normal… I'm different. OK, a lot different!

There was a time when I wasn't respected--people treated me like I was junk.

But it all changed when I met her... This is the story of how she changed my life...

It was another day in school, and life sucked. I had no friends and my family didn't respect me at all. In fact my Aunt Carla made me clean practically everything in the house twice before going to school, which meant I had to go to bed at 8 O'clock and wake up at 5 in the morning every day to just get my chores done.

I went to class with my head down. I always had my head in a book. I found freedom only virtually, in books--freedom I've wished to have my whole life.

That basically summarizes my school year… until Prom came around.

It seemed as though everybody was talking about Prom since the beginning of the year. "Who should I take?", "Who are you taking?", "Who is so-and-so taking?" and how wonderful it was going to be, BLAH, BLAH, BLAH...

I basically paid no attention to it until Jake Matthews brought it up a few days before this supposed "Big Day." Jake was a Jock and the QB for the high school. He had a scholarship to any college in the country and every girl in the school crawled after him.

He is popular and boss at pretty much any sport and video game there is.

"Hey Lucio! Do you have a date for the Prom?" Someone asked me.

I turned to see who it was and I couldn't believe it... Jake Matthews was talking to ME.

I tried to play it cool, "Uh... I will get one... possibly."

Jake laughed and said, "How much do you want to bet that you can't get a date? I'll pay you $100 if you get a date."

"I... Uh... Okay." I stammered.

"And if you don´t get a Date to the Prom you owe me $100. Deal?" Jake said extending his hand.

"Deal." I said as I shook his hand.

"Good luck, you ugly." Jake said.

"Uh... you to... Jerk face."

Jake laughed with his buddies and said, "Is that the best you got 'Lucy'?"

I turned and walked to my class. People tease me by calling me Lucy because my name is Lucio Guawnito. My Grandfather is Spanish and my father grew up there then moved to San Diego and met my mother there.

I didn't really get to know my Mother that well because she passed away before I was 6 years old...

She was driving home from the Hospital where she was working when she stopped at a stoplight and a car came speeding back from behind her crashing into the back killing her instantly.

My Father went into distraught and he was always drunk and at night he would beat me saying that it was my fault that she died...

My neighbor eventually heard me screaming and called the police.

They took my father off of me and moved me to my aunts house to live in. My aunt wasn't as bad as my Father but she was still bad... She made me do back breaking work and gave me new clothes twice every year. 

So yeah... What a beautiful world I live in right? 

© 2015 C. Lee Battaglia


Author's Note

C. Lee Battaglia
A school project I'm working on... How do you like it so far... Do you think it's a prize winner or is there more construction I need to build?

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That is really sad but a really great write. I hope this isn't a non fiction story.

Posted 8 Years Ago


C. Lee Battaglia

8 Years Ago

Thank you please look at some of my newer.
And it isn't...
Thank you!!!!
KittyKatgirl

8 Years Ago

Ok that's good and I will but I am a bit busy at the moment and only had time to read one piece of w.. read more
C. Lee Battaglia

8 Years Ago

Thanks!............
That was really good...Sad but good. Great write and keep writing!

Posted 9 Years Ago


An interesting first chapter ... I look forward to the next chapter to see where you will go with this story ...

Posted 9 Years Ago


C. Lee Battaglia

8 Years Ago

Marvin
I'm back!!!
Great story Lee. Keep posting

Posted 9 Years Ago


It's very good: maybe a little more character development, but assuming that is to come: you as I've heard a famous artist say: don't bore us, get to the chorus...and you did just that. I'm certain it will be a winner; I am already intrigued and even though I'm much older, vivid imagery of high school, pressures; abuse is everywhere: I wish only that you may be more open about your feeling of the abuse. How sad and desperately alone you felt. Just maybe elaborate more on that, but great work, really. Thank you so very much. Dale

Posted 9 Years Ago


I think it's pretty good, but after the build up of the prom and the bet I got lost in how his mom died. other than that it's pretty good.

Posted 9 Years Ago


So far the story is going good. I think you could modify the words here -
"I didn't really get to know my Mother that well because she passed away before I was 6 years old...

She was driving home from the Hospital where she was working when she stopped at a stoplight and a car came speeding back from behind her crashing into the back killing her instantly."

In the first line - 'before I was 6 years old' and the second paragraph is difficult to understand.

Leaving those apart, it is going brilliantly and is keeping the reader hooked to your story. :)


Posted 9 Years Ago



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My name is C. Lee Battaglia and I love to read… I read so much that my Mom grounds me from reading and tells me to go do something else. I am 20 years old. I hated reading when I was little .. more..

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