The Rabbit and the Snake

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          The Rabbit and the Snake

  Once upon a time there lived a family of four. The family wasn't necessarily rich but they weren't poor. The family had a brother, a sister, and a mom and dad. The boy's name was John and the girl's name was Elizabeth but everyone called her Liz for short. John loved exploring and solving mysteries and Liz loved being in plays and acting things.

 

          One day John was out in the creek for like his thousandth time when he saw something peculiar. It looked like a mixture of a rabbit and a snake! He thought he was just imagining things so he pinched himself but it was still there. It had four legs connecting to a fat but long middle which was attached to a head of a snake but had about 3 inch long fangs and hopped about 3 feet high!

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          Liz was preparing to go to her play called “The rabbit and the Snake” but she realized John wasn't home so she told mom and mom called John's phone but he didn't answer so she called again and John didn't answer again and mom and Liz thought that was strange because John usually answered his phone.

 

          After about 10 minutes John called back on his phone and was panting so Liz asked "What's wrong John?"

Then John said, "Open the door right now!"

Liz ran over to the door and unlocked it when John flung open the door and closed it and locked the door on his way in. Then Liz caught a glimpse of the weird monster thing and screamed at the top of her lungs saying, "MONSTER!" Then her mom and dad came over to her and asked what was wrong. Then Liz opened the door and there the monster was and she screamed the same thing but then her mom asked, “Are you messing with me?" then Liz said” Are you blind the, monster is right in front of your face!"

"I think you need glasses honey. There's only a cute rabbit next to a snake and it's trying to enter the yard but something is stopping it from entering the yard but I suppose you could think the monster could be a monster."

Then John closed the door and told Liz to come into his room and they did.

 

          When they got into John's room John told Liz, "Maybe only we can see the monster because we might have special eyes and mom and dad might not have the special eyes.

Then Liz said, "I suppose that might be the reason but what I'm curious about is why can't the monster enter the yard?"

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

What do you think of it? Do you think I should continue with this story?

Reviews

[Laura Lynn]

This is very creative. I can't believe a rabbit and a snake; I don't know how I feel about monster creatures, they seem horrific. I don't see the benefit in so much scaring, but some people scare more than others. It is good to warn us and we do get scared. It's better than being delusional all the time.

[C. Lee Battaglia]

Thank you so much. Do you think I should continue with this story?

[Laura Lynn]

does it have to be the cross between a snake and a rabbit? I think you should continue it, but take it in a radically different direction

[C. Lee Battaglia]

Alright I will

[Valkyrie Warrior]

I agree with the other review. I think it is a good story!

[C. Lee Battaglia]

Thanks Lorna! I'm glad you liked it.

[Valkyrie Warrior]

:)!!!!!!!!

[C. Lee Battaglia]

Why are you so nice?

[Valkyrie Warrior]

I'm not, your just really good!

[C. Lee Battaglia]

Thank you! You are to!

[Valkyrie Warrior]

Thank you!