Some Mad Hope

Though in vain, I struggle and fight

I live through it, I strictly abide

I persevere and endure it all

'Cause there's some mad hope left inside.

I stare at my God day and night

Obsessed with belief that he will rise

One day, and bid all my worries goodbye

Yeah there's some mad hope left inside.

I still have faith, I show I'm fine

I pray for the best, do that all the time

I tell my heart there's still good in life

For there's some mad hope left inside.

I crave for joy, but its hard to find

With what I've got I hardly can smile

I tell myself not ever to cry

'cause there's some mad hope left inside.

Now, on the verge of breaking down

Where I find nothing I can hold on to

Disheartened, devastated, but still I fight

For there's still some mad hope left inside...

-Charuta

Author's Note

A young novice who loves writing... Readers, pls do leave ur comments nd views... or rate my work.. pls do!

Reviews

[londenberg]

id first say keep up the fight, then I realize that we all struggle & have faith in someone or something. I like poetry, I wish I could write it but since I cant, I like to read it & while stumbling thru, I saw this upon the wall of a pub & so I stopped, then nodded my head & smiled. sincerely from the writer of "LondenBerg by Lord Biron."

[Charu Charms]

Thankyou.. Didn't get you fully though... You saw WHAT on the wall of a pub?

[RavingMad]

Well, very good poem :) I like how the very last line gives some sense of hope :) I find it's always good to leave the reader with some hope (though I don't always do that with my own writing haha).

Constructive criticism:
"I crave for joy" is just a little awkward. You'd ordinarily say "I crave joy" (I personally crave joy AND chocolate XP). It almost feels like you're saying "I pray for joy". That's acceptable grammatically :)

So other than a few grammar issues, it's a very good poem :) Keep up the good work! :)

[Trigorin]

Not bad. Solemn tone gets the message across fairly well, and the relative brevity of this helps, I think. The second stanza is the best one. Good work.

[Charu Charms]

Thankyou.. Remember u r free to criticise! Anything you feel needs improvement in my work...pls let me know!