Depth In My Soul

Everything was normal on Malbury Lane.  Mrs.Makinski was clipping her hedges.  Mr. Maninski was pretending to help by look through peoples windows to see the score on the sunday football game.  Just down the street the Adam's kids Annie and Jack were playing a game of monkey in the middle with there nieghbor Jimmy Kruso who lived with his Grandma who was the only person on the whole street without a husband for he dies in a car crash 2 years ago. Everyone was having a good time exepet for Carl Baker.  Carl was a 34-year old man that had no one because his wife Mary and his two kids Sam and Ryan died at there old house from a mistirous fire that no one could figure out how it started.  Carl was the only one to survive the fire.  He move to Malbury Lane to forget about his probem.  But sadly it didnt work since now after 6 years he is still on 13 diferent mediction  3 of which times he took them was because of overdosige or not taking the pills.  He was also the streets freak.  Every holloween some kids would egg his house.  Every valentines day some person would send him a velentines day some oner would send him a one of those cards that would say somthing like "will you be my valentine?" or "Be mine" and would always tell him to meet them at diffrent locations every year and then when he showed up they would egg him after about 3 years of egging you would think you would stop going to those valentine invataions he would stop going to those places but his sultion was jsut to stop eating eggs and you problly guess how well that went!  Well if you don't know i will tell you and let me tell you it didnt go very well.  And let me tell this to you too this story is about him and his probles and what he goes through on a day-to-day bases.  So if you want to have a happy story where no one gets hurt and feelings are crushed and hearts turn black this is not the story  for you.  Go pick up sleeping bueaty or snow white.  For this is the story of the life of Carl.

Author's Note

don't be mean please!!!!!

Reviews

[Whitney]

nice!















:)

[Orlando Murcia]

I think you have a lot of potential.
Writing is a process like many of us
I know you will continue doing this
because by this wonderful little story
it shows that you have a lot in you to keep
writing about.

Great job!

And do not I repeat do not let anybody
discourage you no matter what

They are not perfect either

Great job once again

Orlando Murcia

[Emza S]

Lolz, how could I be mean to you? I like it, but there are a few grammar mistakes. XD.

I think you should keep on writing, because you're doing a really great job.