No Scars

 I am only two hours in,

already buried in pity I am drawn to your sin.

Painted red with lies that seep into my bones,

Another two hours and I'll be all alone. 

It's not hard for me to forget who I am...

one more conflicting thought and I wont know where I stand. 

All I know is I would bleed for you,

and I will hide the scars if you want me to. 

I will turn my back on all of the light...

will you fix my wrongs will you make me right?

If I cried for you would you wipe away my tears?

You know I lied to God for you that's why he put me here.

I would break this word just to see you smile...

I may hate my world but I love you all the while.

If I am less than you than I am so sorry that I am,

but I am still drawn to you and I am only two hours in. 

I know now that I can't make you feel,

and I know now that you can't make me real. 

Hours and hours in this place takes its toll.

With calculating hands that will not let me go.

I'll survive, I will fight hard for you...

and I will hide the scars if you want me to.

Author's Note

This is a song.

Reviews

[MerylDivya]

Great rhyme scheme. What a sad story suggested here. Very emotional

[Simon Welsh]

Love that last line. Nicely done.

[Jamie R. Robillard Sr.]

It is a very good write Jessica though it needs work on scansion. They are lyrics so unless you have some extremely off he wall genre in mind then it will have to conform to a 4/4 common time. Though syllables, like notes can be stretched, there are parts here that are just to far out to be successfully put to music. There is only so much artistic liberty as a singer that you can take :P. Get the scansion tight and it will be an awesome song. Looking forward to hearing you sing it!

[Malister Mikey]

such a beautiful melody dark and sad, but yes beautiful is the perfect word to describe it

[e. f. watson]

I rlly dig this, esp. as a song! It has a funny way of being aware and perhaps laughing a little bit at it's own potential for novelty/cliché.

"All I know is I would bleed for you,
and I will hide the scars if you want me to."
^really dig that part, especially as a chorus type deal.