Crack and crumble

Crack and crumble and fall for me,
let love portray what we could never be.

If I let your light take my dark,
will you be there for me when I fall apart?

You see my dark helps to hide my cracks,
and the parts of me that I will never get back...

From all the times I have fallen before,
I have lost so much I can not lose much more.

You see I do not wish to take from you,
these irreplaceable pieces I have suffered through.

I do not wish to cause you pain,
but I am shaking with fear at what still remains.

When the light comes on and you see my flaws,
will you regret loving me after the fall?

If it breaks you how could I live with myself,
having revealed to you what I hid so well?

The hardest part about loving you is to see,
all the parts that I still hate about me.

Reviews

[KeeD]

This was cool, well written. The hardest part about love you is to see, all the parts that I still hate about me. Man that resonates in my head over and over again.. it's got so much power in just two lines and covers almost most of my life.

[Yours Truly]

Love this one! Don't even know what to say but that I definitely want to put this one in my library. lol, nice write. :)

[Swaroop Manikandan]

here again... much deeper...

[daisy]

This is really quite beautiful, well done, this deserves more attention. Keep writing :)

[Lyn Anderson]

This, is amazing. In intricate detail, but with sparse numbers of words, you sum up what it is like to lose and lose, and try to do it again.

[Malister Mikey]

The rhyme scheme is quite catching and the meaning is very powerful in this piece to me, because I feel this way even now sometimes it really pulled me in.

[Zakari Schmidt]

"My dark helps to hide my cracks"
..this made for a cool mental picture, one I like! You put darkness to good use lol

[Jessica Lynn Polley]

Thank you I try lol :)

[Jamie R. Robillard Sr.]

I can certainly relate to this piece. It is great work.

In the 4th Stanza is loose suppose to be lose? In the 9th I feel like the break should be after you?

The hardest part about loving you,
Is to see all the parts that I still hate about me.

[Jessica Lynn Polley]

That last line is for rhyme sake but i will try to find a way to fix it. You are right about the 4th stanza I will fix that thank you.
ps. You should check out my poem Touching Fire I think you will really like it.