white lines

White lines like white lies bring me somewhere new... 

where fears die but hope thrives and I can finally look at you... 

and your light does not darken mine because I am already blind... 

so that my cracks are only yours to see but they are still mine. 

Butterflies dance on my skin, they kiss me everywhere they can, 

assuring me of my beauty, and hiding what I truly am. 

When the pain is gone and I am free I thank every single star... 

for the momentary release of everything that we are. 

My facade cracks and crumbles but i no longer care, 

because I am someplace so far away and you will never find me there. 

Even when we are face to face you do not really see me, 

with redemption all but forgotten I just wanted to be free. 

A little more every day I push and push and push some more... 

Hoping someday It will take me because I do not like me anymore. 

I am a coward, but i do not even care... 

because when my world exploded you were not even there.

Reviews

[Ryan Riley]

Beautifully done. I enjoy your writings. Hit home for me.

[Malister Mikey]

You are a fantastic writer Jessica everything you write is so deep and filled with such power.

[Luissanto]

Very well written, beautiful flow. Your writing captivates thoughts
while it pulls at your soul. Well done...

[Ian Gilmour]

The paradox of trusting others in a relationship is heavy and this poem reflects that. The people who lift us higher are so often the ones who end up leaving us at our lowest. "Thou who curest can maketh ill" In the third line, the narrator says that they are already blind, that's good attention to craft and an interesting take on "blind love." A line worth examining and discussing for sure.

[Jessica Lynn Polley]

Hi Ian first of all let me say that I love our exchanges because they are always very thought provoking...Now about this poem I think you picked up on exactly what I was putting down here it is supposed to centralize on the fact that the ones we love have the power to cut us the deepest. In the the third line where it is talking about being blind I put that there in the beginning because that is how I view love...that you must first go blind before you can love someone because all of the imperfections and problems people generate when they glue themselves to another person is just to much to coexist with love. Is there a such thing as perfect love? I am not sure but I have never seen it...

[Jake Donald Stephens]

Relationships really are funny things. They affect us in so many ways. They even shape our perceptions of ourselves.
What I'm thinking about is the difference between being in a relationship and being in love. They say you have to love yourself before you can love anyone else. But don't we ultimately end up loving other people because of the way they make us feel? What is "in love", anyway? And why the need to put labels on relationships all the time?
What is a "boyfriend" or "girlfriend"? A friend is a friend, right?
But someone who doesn't make you feel good about yourself......that wouldn't be a good friend, now would they?

[Jessica Lynn Polley]

Personally I think love is relative to the person and the relationship...but I LOVE your ideas. You always approach my poems with questions and If I could I would answer them all but you seem to be asking the same ones that I am...so we can just be lost together lol.
p.s. I also love the fact my poetry is so thought provoking to you...so even if I can not answer, you should keep asking.

[Bree135]

This is amazing you are so talented at writing. I love how descriptive you are . I really love this poem :)

[Jessica Lynn Polley]

Thank you so much. I am so glad you liked it.

[Fran Marie]

a powerful poem expressing inner feelings so well...

and displaying a determination to carry on....well DonE!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

great last line....you really put together some excellent rhythm in this poem....and i like how the speaker shows the strength of having put the pieces back together and moved on.

[Jessica Lynn Polley]

Thank you so much I am glad you enjoyed it! :)

[Jack Cassidy]

This is beautiful. I think you're a very talented poet... I've found it very difficult in rhyming things that don't suggest a child's mindset. You're approach seems sincere and I admire that. Reality sort of hits you in the last two lines, at least it did me.


K.

[Jessica Lynn Polley]

Thank you so much I am glad you enjoyed this poem. It was hard for me to write because it is extremely personal, but I am so happy you like it.