Black White and Blue

I stair at black skies,

white stars,

and blue eyes.

I scream through thick clouds

pelting rain and

and rushing crowds.

I love a little to much 

the things that break my heart 

and leave me undone.

I try every night 

to push you away

and throw the fight.

I wonder if we will fall

for the silly people 

that do not care at all.

I tried to make you see

the melting lines 

between you and me.

You were not there 

when I screamed so loud

that I broke the stars and split the clouds!

You were not not there 

when I tore open the black skies...

and made the sun shine in the middle of the night.

I will leave with words unspoken...

to spare you...the heart unbroken.

Reviews

[Oswald Chesterfield Cob..]

Honestly, this made me tear up a bit, but that's GOOD! :D I could feel what the words wanted me too :) Trust me my friend, I've been where you are so many times, I may be sixteen, but my life since I was 7 has been like an adults life. I have been heartbroken so so many times, it's ridiculous. But I'm here if you want to talk :) You shall get a 100! ^*^

[Jake Donald Stephens]

When the one we need isn't there when we need them most. Your work is always serious, and never fails to convey emotion with eloquence. And what makes us human, if not our feelings? And what is the purpose of writing, but to express and define these things?

This grabbed me, truly a honest poem, about letting someone go, and to deal with all the pain that goes with it. Very sad and beautiful worded by you. Thank you Jessica.

- Elisa

[Cory Barrett]

That was a very kind way to let someone go.

[Ryan Riley]

Love this writing! Very powerful emotions....I can definitely relate to this

[lady sunshine]

unrequited love? i so much can relate to it....

[Ian Gilmour]

Vengefulness on behalf of the broken person is a dangerous game but it works well here. I like the rhyme scheme as well. The word choices are carefully picked and it shows, the 3 lines in the stanza each pack a punch that extends beyond immediate imagery or simple single ideas into complex metaphors and extended meanings. That's important to note, especially within the context of the subject matter, love is vastly complicated and your poem mimics that idea very well.

[Leo M. Zeac]

This is really cool, so unique. The constant use of the color terminology really makes this poem stand out, and the colors chosen really gives you that sense of depression and sorrow but still portrays that sense of yearning and hope. I especially love the part about how the skies tore open and made the sun shine at night! The last stanza is really my only criticism, because it sort of ends abruptly and seems less verbal than the rest of the poem. Aside from that, this is a really beautiful poem.