Sweet Release

Poem about cutting

This glistening blade unleashes a crimson flow
But a few drops, but there the same
Pain gives way to relief
Finally I am rid of my stress... for now

Times are hard, and I get depressed
I wanna believe it can get better
But it hasn't
And it won't

I'm running out of places to cut
Marks all up my arm above my elbow
Maybe the inside of my thigh will work
Rubbing would help too, if I ever had the desire

Twice today, and once more before I sleep
This is gone way out of control
Life is too hard and cutting isn't relieving the stress quick enough
This time I may actually do it

Yes, this time I cut for the last time

Author's Note

Doesn't rhyme, but I like it that way I think

Ambiguous end. Could be suicide or ending cutting.

Up to you

Reviews

[Victoria Elizabeth]

very good, i love it!!!

[Steven Cash]

Thanks

[Ahmad Cox]

Very empathetic and powerful

[Steven Cash]

Thanks

[Ana Soo]

Self-mutilation? i don't get why others do that although i understand the emotional struggles. this is a very serious poem Steven. Your writings are slowly getting more serious, what's up?

[Steven Cash]

Idk I just write whatever comes off my fingers

[Ana Soo]

your fingers must be of great powers then. nice one!

[Kes]

I do have times where I feel I want to cut myself, but I never have.
I caught my finger on a bread knife today and it hurt so much! At the moment I'm not in a bad place and I can't imagine wanting to inflict that pain on myself.
Great write.
K

[Steven Cash]

Thanks

[SmileBig :)]

This relates almost perfectly to my pathetic life. Cut after cut, it's not enough. So many people don't understand cutting but I think you're almost there. The emotion doesn't come through as well, but ur not a cutter so i understand. Good attempt. The words are all true.

[Steven Cash]

yea... I tried...

Thanks for reading

[deepblue04]

suicide is not the answer!!! Nor is cutting!!!!!!!!!

[Steven Cash]

true

[Chris]

Where were you in this piece? The emotional bond didn't come across there. It was like a musician just singing someone else's song without feeling or understanding their words. Maybe you cut OR not... but you didn't "touch" what the "IT" is about - least to me.

The subject is powerful and hurt-full. It deserves attention and care. It deserves all of the yourself you can put in. Which in the end is what we do ...as poets.

[Steven Cash]

Thanks for your opinion

[Chris]

I really didn't ding or rag on you... you chose a strong and relevant subject. When you put real HEAT in your works - pieces of you - they really come across so much stronger and personal! I've seen other pieces you've written where you did. And yeah, it was just my opinion - but I came on my on to see more of you.

[Chris]

the last on = own

[Steven Cash]

well i appreciate it

i try my best to convey the hurt... Even though i have never cut

just a little short coming

[Chris]

it's hard... but if you really listen to those that do - hurt that bad and come to understand them and care about them...then your words will have YOU in them and that is all anyone can ask for... bits of YOU in your words, ya know? No one ever says its easy - unless they are fooling themselves.

[Emily B]

you don't have to tell me that you don't cut, i read it in your words

i guess people who see themselves in the words feel emotional about them, but there is no apparent emotion from the narrator. I guess I want to be shocked. I want the words to come at me in an unexpected way. I want to feel the slices on my arm and blood ooze. Remember, when our words meet metal we can change the world.

[Steven Cash]

Well thanks for reading at least

[Emily B]

don't be discouraged, i've read a lot of poems, one of these days you're going to kncok my socks off and you'll know it

[Emily B]

Jim Wayne Miller, on his poetry:

" Growing up in North Carolina, I was often amused, along with other natives, at tourists who fished the trout streams. The pools, so perfectly clear, had a deceptive depth. Fishermen unacquainted with them were forever stepping into what they thought was knee-deep water and going in up to their waists or even their armpits, sometimes being floated right off their feet. I try to make poems like those pools, so simple and clear their depth is deceiving. I want the writing to be so transparent that the reader forgets he is reading and is aware only that he is having an experience. He is suddenly plunged deeper than he expected and comes up shivering."

" Good poetry will deal with ordinary things...and still manage to evoke a sense of wonder, of the miraculous."

[Steven Cash]

Wow powerful. Thanks for sharing

I hope you keep reading anything new I write. In hopes I can wow you.

[Emily B]

no worries, i like your spirit

[Steven Cash]

Thanks

I like a good challenge

[Fiona Nadine]

I do self-harm and this is powerful. Well done.
(I've been cut free for about a month)

[Steven Cash]

Thanks Fiona

& love the pic

[Fiona Nadine]

You're welcome and thanks :-)

[A. V. Madison]

It's great to know that I'm not alone, that I'm not the only one :.) Rating 100/100.

[A. V. Madison]

As in, I mean, I'm not the only one that understands the euphoria that comes with cutting. Everyone thinks you're insane when you cut. No one understands that it's like an addiction, once you start... it's real damn hard to stop.

[Steven Cash]

True true

Thanks Maddie. Glad you are back

PM me when you can