Intruder—Original Scary Story

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You are awake now.

You have broken free of the dream.

The terrible dream.

You are shaking in your bed, cold sweats seizing your body.

An unbearable sense of dread overcomes you as you see the doorknob open slowly. 

It is fairly dark, but you can clearly make out the tall, dark figure that has just entered your bedroom.

Moonlight is cascading in through the window, and catching his eyes.

They are a pair of sinister eyes, and at the very sight of them you want to cry out. But you know it won’t help, because you are alone at home.

Now he edges closer towards you, his hands slowly rising from his sides.

Your breathing is shallow and the sounds are getting lumped up in your throat.

And now he has his hands around your neck. He is strangling you, and you can feel yourself slipping out of consciousness.

As you pass out you see the smile on his face widening. You are dying, and he is enjoying it.

You fight. Fight for life.

You are awake now.

You have broken free of the dream.

The terrible dream

You are shaking in your bed, cold sweats seizing your body.

An unbearable sense of dread overcomes you as you see the doorknob open slowly…

Author's Note

Creepy...

Reviews

[No More Angels]

oh man that freaked me out at the end owo great job!

[Steven Cash]

Thank you much!

[Ama May Cooper]

*shiver* eerie. creepy the great curse that is the recurring dream

[Steven Cash]

yep yep yep

thanks!

[Mystik]

That is scary....gave me chills

[Steven Cash]

lol glad it did

[sierrasparks91]

that is freaking creepy but pretty good so far keep up the work

[Steven Cash]

Thank you much!

[sierrasparks91]

welcome :)

[.]

All I can say is that this is CREEPY, HORROR and SCARY. Three words that mean the same thing. Still loving these stories! 100/100 :D

[Steven Cash]

Thanks

[.]

No problem! :D

[Ahmad Cox]

Wow short but I am already gripped. Good job

[Steven Cash]

Thanks

[Mel]

Very enjoyable read. Thank you!

[Steven Cash]

Thanks to you for reading

[Allycat]

Interesting...It has a very eerie, creepy feeling to it but I like it :D amazing job, as always :)

[Steven Cash]

Thank you much!

[Allycat]

my pleasure :D

[Kymberley Dawn]

tht was awesome i really liked it

[Steven Cash]

Thanks