Shine

Yes, I doesn't really rhyme

Pretty girl with the pretty smile
Such a personality
Such a joy to be around
Never be afraid to shine

Never let em tell you that you aren't good enough
You are perfect
Just as you are
Never be afraid to shine

Who cares if you aren't skinny like the rest?
Sexy is skin deep
Beauty is from inside
Never be afraid to shine

Life may be hard and guys may be rough
Don't let them define you
Never give up
Never be afraid to shine

Author's Note

It doesn't really rhyme, but it's good.

Reviews

[Emily B]

it has a very lyrical quality, if it could be improved at all, i would suggest playing with the spacing, punctuation to improve the way the words are delivered

i'm glad that it doesn't rhyme

[Steven Cash]

gotcha

thanks Em

[Shelley Holt-Lowrey]

Steven, what beautiful sentiments set to this rhythmic little piece. It is very sweet. And well executed.

[Steven Cash]

Thanks so much Shelley

[The Refined Poet]

Let me add a rhyme to the page for you:

Don't matter that it didn't rhyme.
You delivered a great poem like other times.
The words you wrote are true.
Keep writing poetry that reflects you.
You are the one known as Steven Cash,
Keep crafting poetry and prose that is first class!

I loved the third stanza of this poem.

"Who cares if you aren't skinny like the rest?
Sexy is skin deep
Beauty is from inside
Never be afraid to shine"

Excellent work!

[Steven Cash]

Wow, well thank you so much, TRP

I appreciate it.

BTW, you remind me of Danny Rebus from the new Electric Company

[The Refined Poet]

lol... ok... I don't really know how to take that, but thanks... lol... I guess it is the hat... lol

[Steven Cash]

lol yea here is a pic of the guy

http://images.wikia.com/theelectriccompany/images/5/5a/Danny.png

you guys could be cousins

[The Refined Poet]

lol... of course, I am the better looking cousin... my opinion of course... I may have to update my picture.... lol

[Steven Cash]

lol yea, or just upload some pics of you to the photos section

[The Refined Poet]

lol... I will have to do that I suppose... does that make me vain? ... don't answer that... lol...

[Steven Cash]

naw, it wouldn't make you vain

you have those pics on Youtube (yea, i checked u out on the Tube)

[The Refined Poet]

oh I see... the videos weren't too bad were they?

[Steven Cash]

well, I saw the one that's on your profile. and the one about Psalms 23:4

they weren't bad, no.

tell you what, let's pick this convo up in message if you have the time

just inbox me

[Jolie Blossom]

Poems don't need to rhyme, so dont you worry about that. It was good, keep it up :)

[Steven Cash]

Thank you, Jolie!

[meg333]

It doesn't need to rhyme, silly! What a great message.

[Steven Cash]

Thank you much, Meg, I appreciate it!

[Brielle Cartny]

Gorgeous!

[Steven Cash]

Thanks

[Ahmad Cox]

Brought a smile to my face

[Steven Cash]

Glad it did

[Kuhr Gred]

it's ok.. you makes us happy .. while reading :)
- Kuhr gred

[Steven Cash]

thanks

[That1Nerd23]

This is sweet. I like it! Great job!

[Steven Cash]

Thanks Jessa

[That1Nerd23]

You're welcome, Steven.

[Amanda J. S.]

Love this! You really appreciate girls, huh? :-)