She's No Longer With You

Moral: Break-ups are hard, especially when it is your fault. But life is still worth living.

You roll over in bed and open your eyes

The empty space beside you makes you realize

She’s no longer with you

You get to the sink and begin to comb your hair

And notice there’s no beautiful song in the air

Cause she’s no longer with you

 

Every time you get a break on your job

You want to call home, but instead you sob

She’s no longer with you

Now your lunch is one on your own

She’s not going to have lunch waiting at home

Cause she’s no longer with you

 

You swear at yourself, wishing you’d not yelled

Wishing you could take back the time, cause you can tell

She’s no longer with you

Why’d you fight? It was so benign

All she did was talk to a guy

And she’s no longer with you

 

Your temper was hot, and now you regret

The thing you did, and the things you said

Cause she’s no longer with you

Now you stand above the streets

People ask you not to do the deed

But she’s no longer with you

 

And because she’s no longer with you

There is no reason to live

Or is there?

Reviews

[John Phoenix Hutchinson..]

I got as far as the first two lines and scrolled down quickly! Some poems are too raw for me at moment. My heartbreak is still fresh. That shows the emotional power of poetry though doesnt it? That only two lines upset me.

I think if i had kept on reading I would of had a tear in my eye.

[Steven Cash]

aw, sorry it made you feel that way.

This is just what popped into mind and I write it down

[Steven Cash]

Thanks for being honest, and I hope you can find some healing soon

[Jolie Blossom]

hope your heart heals soon john!

[Violet Dreams...]

Heart break! your poem portrays it so well. The feeling of someone close disappear, such a strong feeling.Beautiful work

[Steven Cash]

Thanks Violet!

[afra]

not all the guys feel the same way ...even when if its their fault ...i loved this poem ....great write

[Steven Cash]

thank you much Afra!

[wesleydaauthor]

i loved this, it was real, i can relate to it. I like all the imagery and how you kind of set the scene. I also enjoyed how it lead to the climax at the end where it's a question of being hopeless.

[Steven Cash]

Glad you liked it, man!

[wesleydaauthor]

i have a similar poem on my page, you should peep it out

[Steven Cash]

Sure, I AM a peeper... lol

[wesleydaauthor]

feel free to give criticism, I'm always trying to improve

[Steven Cash]

ok I will. In fact, send me a read request. I always read poems on read request

[wesleydaauthor]

ok done deal

[Amanda J. S.]

Great poem! exactly how most people—I assume—feel after a breakup! Greaty, great, great :-) lol

[Steven Cash]

Great! LOL

:) glad u liked it!