in remembrance

A farewell to Love

And as the Sun would set
Little fairies would dance on the aisles
Reminding me of you.
You would call my name in soft whispers
Beckon me in tiny steps.

I would stare awhile
half smiles and half cries
You are so far already.
As raindrops slither down the green blades
on the grass
I extend my arm
    you grasp
        in a final farewell

I would kiss you no more -
all the past kisses
hang with droopy eyelids
all around.
And as the last hugs melt away
we would utter one last time
our names
in remembrance.

Reviews

its very nice and i see the point that you are making but i think you can put more emphasis in this poem to express more of the emotion that you have had for this loved one so the reader and feel what you felt as you were righting this piece but it paints a picture...great job ! :D

[Michael X]

the entire poetic vibrance brings your words to glittering life, form, stylized
prose that reminds me of a sculpture, something marble, something beautiful
that would whisper to the heart of the sunniest of days, I can say this poem is honest and awsomely written, you have talent keep it up :)

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

what lovely images you bring forth~ softly you spin a melancholy aura yet imbued with the care of the hopeful heart~

[Dani]

The name is always the one that echoes. It's like a rockslide, in my mind.
This is fabulous. :)

[Lovely Lady]

wow... reminds me of my greatest friend I have know since she was 4 and i was 3! Think i will give her a call in the morning. Thanks for the great write!
~lovely

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. ahhh, beautiful ... and so poignant ... "as the last hugs melt away" is sheer genius ... and this entire poem is an amazingly poetic array of thoughtful words ...