The Sky

Upon entering the city
I felt the change
Churn within me
As i breathe in the air
Thick with greed and poverty
and need
And I feel my breath
thin
People people people
Trying and lying
to win
Theres an angry horn
Behind me
And in front
Yelling
F**k You!
And I cant help but laugh
A little
Because I know I'd do the
same thing
Hands reach out towards you
False notions, false gifts
Coughing and smoking
Hey Nice Shirt!
I watch...
Bongs in windows
I breathe...
Cannaboids in the current
I wince...
Exhaust bubbles about
Sex paints the city
A fluorescent pink
I just want to find Bukowski's
House
I want to knock
On Fante's apartment door
I want to stand in
The same
Proximity
As
These great writers
I want to breathe in
The same air they
breathed
Walk the same steps
They danced upon
But I cant seem to even
Amble along without bumping into
Some a*****e on their phone
Sadly I realize there isn't even
Any air here to breathe
They want to charge me
For it
And all I hear is
Foreign lingo
And terrible
Music
And cigarette smoke wafts
In storms
Maniacs scream
For fun
Roads tangle into knots
Motels and brothels splattered
Upon the dirty canvas of
The city
I have to piss
But I have to be a customer
F**k you
I find a bathroom in an alley
and tug on the handle to
No avail
It wants a f*****g quarter
But I have no
Silver on me
The sun goes down
And the temperature cascades
Down south
The sky
Doesn't change

Author's Note

Tapping, typing, tipping, tapping, writing, written, reading, stop. Thumbs in frenzy upon the screen, fingers at war upon the board.

Reviews

[Laura Lynn]

thanks for entering my contest, it looks like there are only two entries, currently, it wasn't the best laid plan of mice and men..., this is great by the bye, to go back to the beginning when life was new, sounds like a crazy city, thanks for bringing us to reality with this interesting scene it sounds like coming in from the airport I guess, I remember I flew into San Diego when I went there

[Gummy.G]

This has such good rhythm. Lack of care seen through your emotions, it pushed anger. A bit of humor throughout and towards the end, you breezed calm right in. Great job.

[Sami Khalil]

"As i breathe in the air
Thick with greed and poverty
and need
And I feel my breath
thin
People people people
Trying and lying
to win "

A splendid poem and truth. Bravo, sir...:)......................

[ZackOfBridge]

i hate the damed city of angels, every time I go I swear I'll never go back. I liked this poem. You keep control in this long form and put me in LA with your words.

[Mari K]

This is really interesting. I feel the sense of frustration and a little bit of a shattered fantasy. I like it. It's thought provoking.

[Chadvonswan]

Hey! I appreciate the commentary, miss(;
Thanks for reading!