3 Stories

One time in my life I experienced an event that made me question my existence. I was standing on the beach, considering killing myself, when a looming shadow crossed above and all at once there was a impossible splash in the water. The wind covered the screams like a blanket, and the sky opened up.

Harold suggested a movie. I flinched at the mention. His smile lingered in question, and his eyes looked at everything and nothing.

“Why, sure, Harold.”

“I'll see you then.” Harold's dog leashed him away.

I wish he could see me. I don't want to have to explain everything that's happening in the movie to him.

There's a moonlit breeze above the roofs, swaying my body drunkenly. I stare down at all the people in shame. A pigeon lands by my foot on the ledge. It was bleeding out of its eye. It purred like a cat and flew away. Tonight, I have wings, too. I took a step and purred.

Reviews

[Shekinah2015]

Awesome! You definitely put a lot of effort into it. I think you should change it to a poem.

[Christopher Robin]

Heya Chadvonswan!

Thanks for the entry, I appreciate the effort, if you've seen the other entries you may be aware that this is CLOSE to being a submission, but not quite. The competition clearly states there must be 5-10 stories and here I have only 3. Don't worry you're now one of 3 to make a similar mistake, perhaps the rules of the competition were not spelled out clearly enough. Each of the pieces are great, though incredibly fragmented (save the 2nd which is pure gold). I'll see how the other entries come in, you may place simply by being one of the closest to having an actual submission. Otherwise feel free to inbox me another two stories and I will treat it as a complete piece!

Best of luck with the future, and keep up the good work!

-Robin

[ZackOfBridge]

I like the experimentation here. Especially the last, so odd and short, and extraordinary.

[Marie]

The first one is a poem, and so is the last one. The middle one is a story, very subtle, very good.

[Naraly Godinez]

Leave the last one as is
The first one maybe a poem or a short short story the second one is like you to elaborate :)