Confession

Do you hate me

Do you hate me like I hate myself

Or are you wishing

That I was someone else

Would you like me better

If I killed myself

Well I do. I really do

I'm sorry

For all those things I didn't say

And all the things I didn't do

I'm a prisoner

Trapped in my own skin

My hatred consumes me

Condems me in my sin

My ascension is coming

Will you be my guardian

You need to destroy me

Destroy what I've become

The monster inside me

Is gradualy showing, growing

Becoming stronger, faster, hungrier

I'm drinking into oblivion again, spiraling

Spiraling down that hole once again

Somewhere between Heaven and Hell

it's dark, warm, comforting

And coming back to me again

Somethings got ahold of me

I'm stronger headed, weaker minded

In this hole of mine

Do you hate me

Do you hate me like I hate myself

Do you wanna see me choke

Or do you think that I'm a joke

Do you hate me

Like I f*****g hate this world

Supernova soon Sun

Beautiful destruction

One last gasp of air

Death Rattle

Destroy your basterd son.

 

Author's Note

This got me second place. Hope you enjoy it.

Reviews

[Butterflyjean]

Wow, lots of emotion going on here. The reader is captivated with your directness and strength. I feel like you are asking for the brutal truth but in your head you've already heard the answer.

[ape domenigoni]

Do you hate me like I hate myself?....very powerful....I can relate to the feelings in the is poem...

[Khance]

I enjoyed the start of it very much, i am not much of a poetry critic, so you dont have to listen to my review. But i thought that the end seemed quite hurried. Almost as though you were just throwing in sentences to make more filler with rhythmic wording in the hopes of making it conform to the text.

If that doesnt make sense to you, this should: Do you wanna see me choke, Or do you think that I'm a joke? Those two lines stick out of the overall poem for me, they seem out of place. Regardless of that, i thought it was rather well done and i would look forward to seeing more of your stuff in the future.

I hope my review wasnt off putting, i just say what im thinking. :)

[C K.]

What she said - It's very harsh and true and honest. Awesome work ckx

[Celestine Astraea Fires..]

The emotions in this piece are so raw and real. Gritted.